The lecture claims that a set of clay jars found in Iraq earlier by local people was used as electric batteries in ancient time. This claim is not in agreement with that of the passage, which suggests that it is impossible for these vessels being used as batteries in that time.
To begin with, the lecture argues that these vessels were found by local people who were lack of professional knowledge. They may found some metal wires but they were not able to understand how to use them, so the wires were not reported. The passage, on the contrary, suggests that no metal wires found near the jars means the vessels were not used as batteries otherwise they would be attached to some electric conductors.
The second point of difference between the lecture and the passage concerns the use of copper cylinders inside the vessels. the lecture asserts that people in that ancient city invented these cylinders to hold scrolls first, then people found they can be used in other ways, like batteries, so the similarity of the copper cylinders found in two different places does not prove anything.
Finally, the lecture argues that electricity batteries could not only be used to shock people as the symbol of some magic power they cannot explain at that time but also can be used for healing muscles for its effect of releasing. However, the passage contends that there is no way for ancient people to use batteries because there was nothing they could use that replied on electricity.
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Essay evaluation report
a set of clay jars found in Iraq earlier by local people was used as electric batteries
a set of clay jars ... were used as electric batteries
these vessels were found by local people who were lack of professional knowledge.
these vessels were found by local people who were lacking of professional knowledge.
Definitions of lack
noun
the state of being without or not having enough of something.
the case was dismissed for lack of evidence
synonyms: absence, want, need, deficiency, dearth, insufficiency, shortage, shortfall, scarcity, paucity, unavailability, deficit
verb
be without or deficient in.
the novel lacks imagination
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
the above errors appeared in your last essay, but show up again in this essay. You will need to pay attention to those grammatical errors to get higher marks.
The introduction is correct in this essay. but we found out another issue:
difficult_words: 38.0 63.6247240618 60% => More difficult words wanted.
We will watch out in your next essays to see whether you have same issues. If it appears again, you will need to memorize more vocabulary words.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 23 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 12
No. of Words: 256 250
No. of Characters: 1205 1200
No. of Different Words: 123 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.707 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.272 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 78 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 61 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 33 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.491 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.474 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.746 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.174 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... being used as batteries in that time. To begin with, the lecture argues that t...
^^^
Line 3, column 314, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'jars'' or 'jar's'?
Suggestion: jars'; jar's
...ests that no metal wires found near the jars means the vessels were not used as batt...
^^^^
Line 5, column 125, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...of copper cylinders inside the vessels. the lecture asserts that people in that anc...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, second, so, then, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1239.0 1373.03311258 90% => OK
No of words: 256.0 270.72406181 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83984375 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35828824309 2.5805825403 91% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 145.348785872 87% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4921875 0.540411800872 91% => OK
syllable_count: 385.2 419.366225166 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 21.2450331126 132% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4483144553 49.2860985944 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.666666667 110.228320801 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4444444444 21.698381199 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3333333333 7.06452816374 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.45292719316 0.272083759551 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.202213778514 0.0996497079465 203% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0562585934845 0.0662205650399 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264866965983 0.162205337803 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0675884539629 0.0443174109184 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.3589403974 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 53.8541721854 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.0289183223 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.2367328918 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.42419426049 87% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 63.6247240618 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.498013245 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.