In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility.
What are your opinions on this?
Some people consider that children should be involved in some paid works in order to become sophisticated individuals who have valuable work experience and more responsibility. However, others argue that it is totally erroneous that offspring must be put to work at the early age.
On the one hand, employing the infants for some kind of paid work would be absolutely wrong as they should concentrate on their studies at school and home, which is fundamental procedure for future lives. Particularly, if children work in some permanent workplace, they would not have enough time to learn school subjects and as a result of the exhaustion they undergo at work.Furthermore, the benefits of working at the early age are confined. This is mainly because no one would hire offspring for well-paid or some useful occupation due to the vulnerability and inexperience they are. In particular, they could work as a servant in restaurant or seller in the shops. Consequently, it would be misery and hardship for them.
On the other hand, others argue that being engaged in some crafts at the such early age would be vital for children. Particularly, they would gain diverse professions, which are helpful for the circumstances in which they are required to cope with any kind of predicaments. Therefore, they never become jobless because of the many professions they experience in their lifetime.
Additionally, working in early age assist them to learn and take responsibility adequately, which is crucially important in establishing secure family life. For example, in USA infants are encouraged to work at the very early age, in order to pay school fees, which make them to take the responsibility earlier. As a result, the value of life would be a greater extent.
Having investigated both aspects, it appears to me that children should be entailed to temporary occupations as well as their school studies must be under supervision.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 306, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to school'
Suggestion: to school
...hey would not have enough time to learn school subjects and as a result of the exhaust...
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Line 2, column 377, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Furthermore
... of the exhaustion they undergo at work.Furthermore, the benefits of working at the early a...
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Line 5, column 110, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...ld be entailed to temporary occupations as well as their school studies must be under supe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, well, for example, in particular, kind of, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1618.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13650793651 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06622297885 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520634920635 0.561755894193 93% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.6562914753 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.571428571 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276737584326 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0995072805426 0.084324248473 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0812610692708 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151703745829 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0934501690685 0.056905535591 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.