Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
This is one of the controversial issues among people because the result of that can determine the children's destiny. I completely disagree with this claim that today children spend most of their time on a cell phone, inline games, and the others. Here you can see my reasons.
First, it is more likely for children to enlarge their knowledge. Nowadays, people face with tremendous advancement and improvement in t echnologies and sciences. Children need to have a conدection with the new technology to expand their knowledge. They can bring the cell phone to the school, and use it for finding the information about the topic that their teacher is speaking in the class. But in the past children’s sources for learning were their teachers and it limits their knowledge. According to the research on the MIT University, by entering cell phone or laptop to the educational system, students' grades 60% increase.
Second, psychology factor is another noticeable reason. Todays, students must spend most of their time for studying hard and pass several classes such as computer, E nglish or France language. So, they suffer a lot of stress and pressure in their life in comparison with the past. Having a cell phone and playing some amusement and enjoyable games can remove the stress from them and hel ps them to have a healthy mind. In fact, these tools increase their concentration either in the class or studying time.
Third, some of the people think children familiarise with unsuitable people on the social networks. According to their opinion, children should do not have this allow to have the cell phone, or play online games or join to social networks because it brings a lot of problem for them. They believe the new generations are more aggressive than the past children. However, I still assert that these new inventions bring a lot of advantages for the children. Although they maybe spend more time on it and see some inappropriate issues on it, these new inventions help them to familiarise with new people who are prosperous in their job or education. They learn, if they study hard, they can find their favorite job in the future.
In conclusion, learning more, having a health mind and finding a job are the advantages of using new information. Those beneficial can convince people to know Norway's children's success in the education is not comparable with the past children.
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- tpo 26 3
- Do you agree that people easily learn from the friends beside them? Use specific examples and evidences to support your answer. 61
- The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. 73
- Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize . 70
- People learn easily from the friends beside them. 60
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, third, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 7.30242825607 260% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 5.0 12.0772626932 41% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 22.412803532 196% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 30.3222958057 171% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2002.0 1373.03311258 146% => OK
No of words: 402.0 270.72406181 148% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98009950249 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.04702891845 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71855837524 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 145.348785872 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509950248756 0.540411800872 94% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 419.366225166 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 3.25607064018 369% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.23620309051 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 13.0662251656 168% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2668965543 49.2860985944 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0 110.228320801 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2727272727 21.698381199 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95454545455 7.06452816374 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 4.19205298013 215% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 4.33554083885 254% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255614370339 0.272083759551 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769673328308 0.0996497079465 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0610104084066 0.0662205650399 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148549842123 0.162205337803 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0468594523075 0.0443174109184 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.3589403974 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.2367328918 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 63.6247240618 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.7273730684 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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