The article focuses on the negative sides of fossil trade and provides three examples to support the viewpoint. However, the professor states that the benefits of commercial fossil trade greatly outweigh the disadvantages and refutes each of the author’s reasons.
First, the reading claims that when fossils are sold to private collectors, it means that museums will have fewer of them, and in turn, the general public will have fewer chances to see them. But, the professor argues that the general public will have more chances to see them as commercial fossil hunting makes more fossils available, so many more public institutions like libraries and public schools can buy them and display them for the public.
Second, the professor opposes to the author’s opinion that the scientists will lose opportunities to make discoveries from studying fossils since fossils possessed by wealthy collectors. The professor informs that even if important fossils are sold to private collectors, scientists would see the fossils because they have to be identified first by scientists.
Third, the article states that as most commercial fossil collectors are untrained, they frequently destroy important scientific evidence unlike the scientists who have knowledge how to handle and collect the rare and important fossils. On the other hand, the professor posits that even if some damage is done, it is better than having fossils go undiscovered, as universities and other scientific institutions are not operating many fossil collecting operations. So, it is better for the science to have more fossils being found with some less scientific data than it is to have many fossils go completely undiscovered.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 25 in 30
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 12
No. of Words: 266 250
No. of Characters: 1404 1200
No. of Different Words: 133 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.039 4.2
Average Word Length: 5.278 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.697 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 88 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.556 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.962 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.889 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.45 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.74 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.216 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The article focuses on the negative side...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tes each of the author's reasons. First, the reading claims that when...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 146, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...ll have fewer of them, and in turn, the general public will have fewer chances to see them. Bu...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 233, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...hem. But, the professor argues that the general public will have more chances to see them as c...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... them and display them for the public. Second, the professor opposes to ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to be identified first by scientists. Third, the article states that as ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, third, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 30.3222958057 79% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1452.0 1373.03311258 106% => OK
No of words: 266.0 270.72406181 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45864661654 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83913995763 2.5805825403 110% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 145.348785872 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522556390977 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 419.366225166 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 21.2450331126 137% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8122516213 49.2860985944 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.333333333 110.228320801 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5555555556 21.698381199 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.77777777778 7.06452816374 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.513916079536 0.272083759551 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.231927573005 0.0996497079465 233% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0777319396319 0.0662205650399 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.303337321305 0.162205337803 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0870815073387 0.0443174109184 196% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.1 13.3589403974 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 53.8541721854 62% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.0289183223 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.98 12.2367328918 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 63.6247240618 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.498013245 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.