Child obesity has been an increasingly worrying issue. A growing number of people believe that TV advertising junk food has real impact on children health. It is their claim that TV commercials publicising fast foods must not be shown before 9pm. I am totally in favour of this idea. I will present my idea with relevant examples.
It is clear that children are readily tempted by junk foods advertising in television. They often feel hungry, happy and exciting by the commercials. Moreover, some children even tried to lick the TVs screen. In addition, advertising by celebrities, beautiful colours and clowns voice even make more alluring to them. One third of children, when they reach the end of primary school, they are already obese. So, it is necessary to act quickly in order to prevent children suffering from diabetes, heart disease and cancer. One of the best ways to tackle the issue is to curb the junk foods advertising before 9 pm and to impose taxes on junk foods.
Having said that, parents are also responsible for the obesity of their children. Parents are often accused of killing their children with their kindness. The surveys have found shocking levels of negligence and complacency among parents, which is beleived to cause children to eat wrong sorts of foods and sitting around the whole day. Parents generally lack confidence to take their children for out door activities because they feel insecure outside. As a consequence, the children are prone to gain excess weight. So parents should be made aware about the deadly complications of obesity by teachers and governments.
All in all, although child obesity is an exploding nightmare, it can be controlled by banning junk foods advertising and by educating the parents.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, so, third, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1470.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06896551724 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70234847439 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627586206897 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2061597481 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.3684210526 106.682146367 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2631578947 20.7667163134 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.21052631579 7.06120827912 31% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212206091141 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0626690888325 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0622124899989 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141006999126 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.075999706419 0.056905535591 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.0946893788 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.53 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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