Nowadays, we have to concentrate more while teaching children than in past. With advent of technology, today's children are more aware, conscious and inquisitive. We have to deal with academic along with life while teaching children in modern period.
Introduction of social sites, games have prompted children to be heedless in their study. Nowadays, Children focusing on games such as candy crush, temple run have made them poor on study. Whenever they get a chance, they sneakily pick up a mobile and play game. Thus, It have made parents a burden to teach them because they have to watch like a guard until they finishes with their study tasks. Also, use of cell phones and social sites also have made them careless in their study. In these sites, children remains late hours, thus sleeping whole morning rather than reading; to prevent such happening, parents have to focus on their children schedule and have to look after them in certain intervals.
Nowadays, children get used to accustoming modern device such as television, internet. The get much of the information from informal study rather than formal study. These knowledge increases a desire to learn more and creates a doubts in their study. As we know that every aspects have cons and pros, not all opinion is same. Knowing these clash between an opinion makes them bewilder. Children, for instance , are taught that favoring racism is an inimical acts, but while there are many issues in support of racism and many people like them also. We can see Modi, prime minister of India, supporting Hinduism, Donald trump, president of United states, hating Muslims. Similarly, it is same with case of war- children are taught that war is not good, but they see many people supporting war, as war is an ultimate solution of problem. This type of information are easy to get for today's child through many sources. Thus, it can create doubts on child that the lesson, especially moral lesson, instilled in them are not reasonable. Due to this, teacher, parents, society have to make an extra effort to make them believe in order to show them a right track. However, in past days, such information source was rare, people used to believe that they there taught, may be wrong or right, without any doubts.
Some may argue that it helps to sharpen kids mind. However, I still insists that using cell phone, online games jeopardize children education. It may sharpen their mind, but most of their acuteness is used doing unwanted activity. They may focus on how to play more games, how to make online sites more funny. Thus, their unwanted focusing may further provide burden to parents while teaching them.
Finally, due to above mentioned reasons, Parents, I believe, should keep their children out of such things in order to enhance their study. As such things cause most serious damage in children study.
- TOEFL T P O 12 Integrated Writing Task 71
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- TPO-12 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 86
- At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. 66
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 68, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
...trate more while teaching children than in past. With advent of technology, todays chil...
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Line 3, column 273, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'has'?
Suggestion: has
...ick up a mobile and play game. Thus, It have made parents a burden to teach them bec...
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Line 3, column 365, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'finish'
Suggestion: finish
...y have to watch like a guard until they finishes with their study tasks. Also, use of ce...
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Line 5, column 166, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this knowledge' or 'These knowledges'?
Suggestion: This knowledge; These knowledges
...nformal study rather than formal study. These knowledge increases a desire to learn more and cr...
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Line 5, column 227, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a doubt' or simply 'doubts'?
Suggestion: a doubt; doubts
...ases a desire to learn more and creates a doubts in their study. As we know that every a...
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Line 5, column 409, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...es them bewilder. Children, for instance , are taught that favoring racism is an i...
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Line 5, column 459, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'act'?
Suggestion: act
...ght that favoring racism is an inimical acts, but while there are many issues in sup...
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Line 5, column 544, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...ort of racism and many people like them also. We can see Modi, prime minister of Ind...
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Line 7, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
... right, without any doubts. Some may argue that it helps to sharpen kids mind. How...
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Line 7, column 69, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'insist'
Suggestion: insist
... to sharpen kids mind. However, I still insists that using cell phone, online games jeo...
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Line 9, column 141, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...things in order to enhance their study. As such things cause most serious damage i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, look, may, similarly, so, still, thus, while, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2390.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 483.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94824016563 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32380249938 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517598343685 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 734.4 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.3448491107 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.3571428571 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.25 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57142857143 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145970663345 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.044560426357 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0419615666563 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0895009908574 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0409679848848 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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