Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is true that pupils are often anxious about selecting their career path after graduating high school.
While keeping on studying at universities or colleges can be beneficial to some extents, I believe that getting a job as soon as possible has more advantages.
On the one hand, there is a common belief that the youth should continue learning at universities because of two major reasons. Firstly, because students tend to gain academic qualifications and great skills at universities, they have a window of opportunity to choose a wide range of outstanding jobs. For example, some good jobs such as doctors or lawyers require employees well-educated at universities. Secondly, employers seem to appreciate employees who gain a university degree. For instance, university graduates not only are paid a higher salary than other staffs but also have many chances of promotion to their career path.
On the other hand, I would strongly endorse that the youth should immediately seek for a job after school. The first supporting point for this view is that in the modern life, the job market is becoming more difficult. A clear illustration is that there have hundreds of applicants for the same position in a company. Therefore, the youth who work right after school can be more advantageous to look for jobs. Moreover, working right after school helps the youth to become more independent. For example, they can afford the costs of living instead of needing assistance from their parents. As a result, the youth can be more mature, which acts as an extremely significant factor that leads to the success in the future.
In conclusion, while keeping study at universities or colleges can be positive for the career of the youth in the future, I contend that there are more benefits of looking for a job straight after school.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 89, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1530.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03289473684 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81677306972 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5625 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.0193597251 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.0 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2666666667 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.4 7.06120827912 176% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238499327813 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0798436857925 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0794057775498 0.0667982634062 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162790213692 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0848616491847 0.056905535591 149% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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