Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author asserts that the well recognized baskets with a distinctive pattern, which are belived to be made only by people of Palea, were also produced in Lithos, on the basis of discovery of such baskets in the city of Lithos. While author has mentioned several details to support this argument, there is lack of evidence.
To begin with, it is mentioned that the Brim River is very deep and broad, yet, there is no specific evidence eliciting that the river had been the same forever. The river might have been narrow and shallow during the existence of Plean people, and with time, the amount and attrition of water might have incremented the depth and breadth of the river.
If proven that the river was this enormous forever, there is no evidence suggesting that people of Palea were not able to cross the river, it is mentioned that no Palean boats have been found. However, there is no detail stating that people of Lithos were not able to cross the river using their own boats. People of Lithos might have used their boats to trade with people of Palea and during this trade the baskets were brought in Lithos from Palea.
Additionally if stated that no Litho's boats were found either, there is lack of details on chronology of existence of both civilizations. Any evidence stating that both the civilizations were contemporary would have increased the reliability of the argument. Evidence stating that Palea was not the forebearer of Lithos is not provided. People of Palea might have migrated to Lithos due various reasons. Thus the authors claim that the baskets found in Lithos were not made by Palean people is implicitly wrong.
Conclusively, the impact of evidence is huge on the conclusion drawn by the author. Presence of evidence suggesting that Plea was completely isolated, would have strengthened author's assertion.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Additionally,
...s were brought in Lithos from Palea. Additionally if stated that no Lithos boats were fou...
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Line 7, column 405, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...migrated to Lithos due various reasons. Thus the authors claim that the baskets foun...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, then, thus, well, while, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1540.0 2260.96107784 68% => OK
No of words: 311.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95176848875 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51037075178 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 204.123752495 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.459807073955 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 705.55239521 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2330498449 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.0 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2142857143 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35714285714 5.70786347227 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22528055805 0.218282227539 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.08026667316 0.0743258471296 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0549623524506 0.0701772020484 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119148644199 0.128457276422 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0431226076888 0.0628817314937 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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