The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by Sept390 on Thu, 02/02/2017 - 12:02

The chart illustrates the percentage of elder people in the population of Japan, Sweden and Usa from 1940 to 2040. Overall, it can be seen clearly that the population of the three countries are becoming older towards 2040, with Japan making the most notably change.

In 1940, Japan had the least elder people among the three with only 5% of the population aged 65 and over. Sweden stood at second as the population aged 65 and over accounted for around 7%. Meanwhile, 9% of population in USA was 65 years old and over, placing it in the first place.

2040 will see a huge spike in the number of elder people in Japan, as over 25% of the population aged 65 and over. There will also be a gradual rise in the demographic of Sweden and USA, with the percentage of elderly will stand at 25% and 23% respecctively.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 24, Rule ID: LEAST_COMPARATIVE[1]
Message: Non-standard use of the comparative or superlative. Did you mean 'least eld', 'least old'?
Suggestion: least eld; least old
...ably change. In 1940, Japan had the least elder people among the three with only 5% of ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 260, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ill stand at 25% and 23% respecctively.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, second, so, while, in the first place

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 669.0 965.302439024 69% => OK
No of words: 149.0 196.424390244 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.48993288591 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.49378814695 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44724528891 2.65546596893 92% => OK
Unique words: 82.0 106.607317073 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55033557047 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 201.6 283.868780488 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 23.0146359821 43.030603864 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 95.5714285714 112.824112599 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2857142857 22.9334400587 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.14285714286 5.23603664747 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21401729091 0.215688989381 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11784742777 0.103423049105 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061213974748 0.0843802449381 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154582373247 0.15604864568 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.049853589924 0.0819641961636 61% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.2329268293 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 11.4140731707 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.12 8.06136585366 88% => OK
difficult_words: 23.0 40.7170731707 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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