Technocorporation is our top pick for the investment this term. We urge all our clients to invest in this new company. For the first time in ten years, a company that has developed a satellite technology has been approved by the FTA to compete with current satellite provider. The company is techno corporation. A consumer survey last year indicated that over eighty percent of the respondents were dissatisfied with the current satellite television provider and would want to switch to another provider if the industry were not monopoly.Thus , the new venture of technocorporation into satellite televsion will prove to be highly profitable for those who invest now.
Regarding the issue, the author of the argument concludes that one should invest in new
company "Techcorporation". He presents the evidence to suggest it is valid including that the
company is the first to be approved by FTA in the last decade and about a consumer survey.
Though, this issue may have merit but due to lack of relevant evidence, unaddressed
assumptions and vague terminology, the argument is substantiated and deeply flawed.
In the last 10 years, no company has been given the permission by the FTA to provide their
satellite services. With just this statement the author urge people to invest in this company. Just
by taking this point into consideration one can't decide whether to invest in a company or not as
one does investment keeping the primary goal of profit in mind. Nothing about the background of
the company is mentioned and not even the future goals. Company future is dependent on it's
past and present and this information is lacking.
The author mentions about a survey that has been taken but here the exact statistics is
missing. It is claimed that 80% of the consumers of the current satellite television provider as
dissatisfied with the services provided. But, how many people were part of this survey should
have been mentioned which is lacking here. It may even be possible that the people are not
introduced about the rates of the new service provider, and they rates they may put be very high
than the current rates. It can lead to a complete wrong result. Here the author could also have
mentioned about the reason of the people dissatisfaction.It may be due to some sudden glitch in
the services and the current company may even try to overcome over it's flaws.
Here the author makes an assumption that it would be highly profitable to invest in this
company without any relevant evidence. Just as it got approved as a company in the market of
monopoly doesn't tell us that the company would surely progress in the right direction. Also,
author just talks about the present company in the market, but it can be the case that after
Techcoproration another company may even be provided with the license and which may effect
the sales of this company.
To strengthen the argument the author must provide us with the background of the company
and it's future goals. One can only decide when every information about the company is provided
to them. I can concede that the authors point may be valid but we have enough information and
evidence that it may not be the best to go with.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, may, regarding, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2199.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 439.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00911161731 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.793349784 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.44874715262 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 668.7 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.740449438202 135% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5146954291 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.95 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.95 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.1 5.21951772744 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 29.0 4.97078651685 583% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 26.0 7.80617977528 333% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19281285896 0.243740707755 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0707486975542 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595438989796 0.0758088955206 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0599195147953 0.150359130593 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.05480637018 0.0667264976115 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 100.480337079 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.