In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school andstarting university studies.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.
Nowsaday, high school graduated have the tendencies to spend a year for gaining personal experiment before enrolling college and they are supported by surroundings. Despite plentiful benefits of taking gap year brings, there are many considerable downsides that young people might suffer.
Apparently, after one year of either working or travel, young people grow up. As we travel, we know more about the world, the diversification in culture, thereby we would understand the different in behaviors and thoughts of people around the world and rational think about how to communicate friendly. If we choose to work, even sweatshop labour, we would appreciate the money and grow appreciation toward any kind of occupations. These attitudes are highly encouraged inside every persona.
On the other hands, instead of gaining precious experiment, some fall to worthless enjoyment. For instance, some people can’t help travelling and spending money, as a result they find no motivation for coming back home and continue their career. Or, some decide to stop their study for working without serious consideration – which might effect negatively on their future career. In the worse case, as we are too young and when there are no restriction, we are vulnerable to tremendous social problems such as drug addictors, robberies, etcera.
In conclusion, despite the advantages of gap year each get, one might fall for enormous drawbacks. Nevertheless, spending a year off must be continuously encouraged by the society for students to be well-prepared before starting their college life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 136, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to travel' or 'travel'.
Suggestion: to travel; travel
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Line 3, column 343, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, if, nevertheless, so, well, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 1.00243902439 698% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 5.60731707317 268% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.97073170732 227% => Less nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1344.0 965.302439024 139% => OK
No of words: 246.0 196.424390244 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46341463415 4.92477711251 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96035189615 3.73543355544 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9551699243 2.65546596893 111% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 106.607317073 149% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.646341463415 0.547539520022 118% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 283.868780488 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.07073170732 467% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.29902488 43.030603864 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.0 112.824112599 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 22.9334400587 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.75 5.23603664747 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.13902439024 351% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284313204006 0.215688989381 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0985605970964 0.103423049105 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0603323203594 0.0843802449381 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160689730445 0.15604864568 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0252448871671 0.0819641961636 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.2329268293 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 61.2550243902 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.3012195122 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 11.4140731707 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.06136585366 114% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 40.7170731707 174% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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