Society' roles rely not only in providing its leaders competitive skills within a growing economy, but to also teach them the importance of working with a team in order to be succesful in their endeavors.
The argument claims that the society is incumbent on preparing future leaders by installing in them cooperation rather than competition. While this statement may have some validity to it, it is important to look at the roles that leaders possess.
Providing the scenario of an import export company in the clothing industry trying to obtain a clothing deal, the CEO of such company would be required to have an efficient team to direct its calculated moves and to execute his orders, while in the same time, be competitive with other similar companies in the industry. As such, both skills; cooperation and competition are needed, but are used in different circumstances.
In addition, challenging a leader who feel threatened to lose his position, may in fact, stimulate his productivity. Tenure in the education system hinder professors who have no stimulus to improve their skills. This is the analogy of the dunkey and the carrot. It the dunkey already receveived his carrot, why would he try to move faster and please his rider? In the same way, a leader who is not persistently challenged and takes his position for granted will not seek to improve the logistic of a company. Only when flaws are identified, and a reason is given to do so, can a leader direct his energy toward ameliorating a situation.
As a matter of fact, even though one may have such desire, most of the time a competent team is needed. A leader may not have the time or the skills necessary to succeed alone. For example, if a technological developper aims to produce an application for iphone, while he may have the managing skills to convince investisor to subsidize the development, he may not have the skills to produce the application necessary. The developper and CEO of this company will require the tedious work of an extensive team to realize this accomplishment. Therefore, working hand in hand with a team is indispensable as well to be competitive.
While the argument has some validity, it is primordial to consider the role of a leader in an industry and how both competitive and cooperative skills are expected from a leader. Competition will insure a high quality product and services, while cooperation, will insure its realization.
The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
- Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition 58
- Claim: The best test of an argument is its ability to convince someone with an opposing viewpoint.Reason: Only by being forced to defend an idea against the doubts and contrasting views of others does one really discover the value of that idea. 66
- Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition 58
- Government officials should rely on their own judgment rather than unquestioningly carry out the will of the people they serve. 83
- No field of study can advance significantly unless it incorporates knowledge and experience from outside that field. 66
Transition Words or Phrases used:
so, still
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 19.5258426966 5% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 12.4196629213 0% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 14.8657303371 7% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 0.0 11.3162921348 0% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 2.0 33.0505617978 6% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 58.6224719101 9% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 147.0 2235.4752809 7% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 30.0 442.535393258 7% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 2.34034731932 4.55969084622 51% => The fourth root words length is low.
Word Length SD: 3.32014055927 2.79657885939 119% => OK
Unique words: 27.0 215.323595506 13% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.9 0.4932671777 182% => OK
syllable_count: 45.9 704.065955056 7% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 6.24550561798 0% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.2370786517 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 60.3974514979 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 147.0 118.986275619 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.0 23.4991977007 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.21951772744 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.97078651685 20% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 10.2758426966 10% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0865614837415 0.243740707755 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0865614837415 0.0831039109588 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0758088955206 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0865614837415 0.150359130593 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667264976115 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.1392134831 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 0.0 7.92365168539 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 7.0 100.480337079 7% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 11.8971910112 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.7820224719 144% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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