When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Nowadays, technological advances and their rapid and wide applications are having significant impact on a nation's traditional skills and ways of life. some argue that such impact is so extraordinary that it would make conventional skills and life styles obsolete. However, I believe they would continue to thrive by providing alternatives to modern ways of life, and innovative ideas for modern technologies.
First of all, traditional skills and ways of life are becoming an alternative solution to the problems caused by "mainstreamed" ways of life which are greatly influenced by modern technologies. For instances, a cozy restaurant where traditional, home-brewed beer is served, offers another experience to people who are bored with branded beers that have the same flavor and come out of mass production with new technologies. providing diversity and thus enriching modern ways of life, such traditional skills and ways of life would continue to have their place.
Furthermore, conventional skills provide innovative ideas to the development of modern technologies. For example, sparkled by how the work "Love" is traditionally knitted into a sweater by some ethnic minority woman in some parts of Asia, some business managers from textile industry have developed some production lines by applying the traditional skills to Computer-Aided Designs (CAD). The products have boosted the companies' sales which in turn have increased their investment in preserving traditional skills for further developing their technologies.
To conclude, traditional skills and life styles are increasingly becoming a useful alternative to the homogeneity brought by global applications of modern technologies. However, the evolution of technologies is a selection process, whereby some would become obsolete, but there is no doubt that some would thrive when their roles are appreciated.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
No. of Different Words: 149 200 //better to write 5 paragraphs to give more content. The structure is like this:
paragraph 1: introduction, suppose we support side B
paragraph 2: some supports from the side A //you don't have in this essay.
paragraph 3: however, still I support side B. reason one, ...
paragraph 4: moreover, reason two...
paragraph 5: conclusion..
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 280 350
No. of Characters: 1563 1500
No. of Different Words: 149 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.091 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.582 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.129 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 119 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.111 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.161 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.778 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.471 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.703 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.14 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 105, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a nation' or simply 'nations'?
Suggestion: a nation; nations
...ations are having significant impact on a nations traditional skills and ways of life. so...
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Line 1, column 152, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
...ns traditional skills and ways of life. some argue that such impact is so extraordin...
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Line 3, column 435, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Providing
... mass production with new technologies. providing diversity and thus enriching modern way...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, thus, as for, as to, for example, for instance, no doubt, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1624.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.8 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.424432025 2.80592935109 122% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539285714286 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.8651801541 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.636363636 106.682146367 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4545454545 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1818181818 7.06120827912 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170871506499 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0798865529817 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0382488569175 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114052213832 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0391464630689 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 13.0946893788 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 50.2224549098 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.66 12.4159519038 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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