The author claims that the citizens of Forsythe now have a healthier lifestyle. The argument reveals several instances of poor reasoning and ill-defined terminology. To justify this conclusion, the author reasons that a survey shows that people eating habit are more close to the government nutritional recommendation and there is an increase in sales of the products containing healthy nutrition. However, scrutiny of the evidence reveals that it provides little credible support for the author’s conclusion. Hence, the argument is incomplete or unsubstantiated.
First, the argument readily assumes that eating habits are the only factor for having healthful lifestyle this is merely an assumption made without much solid ground. For Example, we know that being healthy without doing regular exercise is impossible and the physical factors are not the only thing to be considered, having less stress, less anxiety, more entertainment etc. also play significant roles in being healthy. Hence, the argument would have been much more convincing if it explicitly states other surveys about physical activities and mental relaxations.
The author also points out that the sales of products containing Kiran, which reduces cholesterol, has increased. This again is a weak and unsupported claim, as it does not demonstrate why it is increased. To illustrate further, the increase in sales of a food product can be a result of an increase in the population. If the argument had provided that, the use of products containing Kiran has increased in the meals of the people then it would be more convincing to the reader.
Finally, the author cites that the sales of a food, which few of the healthiest citizens eat, has decreased. However, the survey of the evidence reveals that it provides little support for author’s opinion in several critical respects, and raises skeptical questions. For example, the reduction in the sale can be a result of having bad sales strategy or increasing price, how the author shows that it means people does not buy this food because they eat healthily? Without answering these questions, the author leaves the reader with the impression that the claims made by the author are not substantive evidence.
In conclusion, the author’s argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it further, the author must provide more concrete evidence, perhaps by way of reliable and a detailed analysis of the people health examination results. Ultimately, better evaluation of the argument needs to have more information about the people eating and physical habits.
- Do you agree or disagree with following statement? Parents today are more involved in their children's education than were parents in the past. 80
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- TPO 5 integrated writing 90
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- "The surface of a section of Route 101, paved just two years ago by Good Intentions Roadways, is now badly cracked with a number of dangerous potholes. In another part of the state, a section of Route 40, paved by Appian Roadways more than four years ago, 75
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, hence, however, if, so, then, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2195.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 409.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36674816626 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9311906005 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496332518337 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 682.2 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.471057884232 212% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.76447105788 171% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8949897284 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.75 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.45 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.9 5.70786347227 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169436737723 0.218282227539 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0506364834372 0.0743258471296 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530991307863 0.0701772020484 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100503733224 0.128457276422 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.048253029791 0.0628817314937 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 98.500998004 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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