There are many days in each person's life could be considered as the most outstanding day like marriage day, graduation day, or bearing a baby. But it is certain that there is one day which stuck in his/her mind since the memory of the day had changed many things in that person's life story. I must admit that for me it happened a couple of years ago, in the day, I moved to the USA. I am confident in choosing this day on which the next paragraphs will elaborate.
In the beginning, I am confident to say that day was a juncture in my life due to the leaving the safe-zone and exceeding out of my habitual lifestyle. However, I had made an exact plan either for the certain unexpected situation or for the things which considered as the things which would be under my control, but I had no vision of the upcoming happenings, and it was kind of inexorable and intolerable the days before my flight to the United States of America. Nonetheless, I had a phenomenal dream, and those pessimistic feelings couldn't have kept me away from my ultimate goals which had been visualized before. Hence, I keep alway remembering that weird day, I moved forward to soar achieving and making a magnificent life. However, at the same time, it made me feel dreadful as it seemed like I was destroying my comfort zone. For such extraordinary and turbulent emotions, this day is my first choice.
Additionally, From that day, I turned to a different person versus the past, and I owe all these conversions from my parent's attempts teaching me not give up in tortuous circumstances. Before this tremendous movement, I had not assumed that I was strong like this. But, Fortunately, after immigration, whenever there is an unbearable vicissitude, I can take advantages those precious lessons from my folks and make it in which way I want. Once something awkward shows up, I remember this golden advice, " My beloved one, just keep in your mind, no pain, no gain", my father said at the airport. I am certainly sure that day was an ascension to flowering as an eminent person not only being a professional individual but also as a human. That's why I keep in my mind that turning incidence, which I call the triggering day.
All in all, I am convicted, my flying day to the USA is the most vital day in my life's calendar for the considerable fluctuations which have been engendered in my personality. Finally, I can say everyone has such triggering day which should be appreciated and understood.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 29, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
There are many days in each persons life could be considered as most import...
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Line 1, column 256, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...the day had changed many things in that persons life story. I must admit that for me it...
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Line 4, column 498, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...l dream, and those pessimistic feelings couldnt have kept away from my ultimate goals w...
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Line 5, column 567, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , &apos
...just keep in your mind, no pain, no gain,' my father said at the airport. I am ce...
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Line 5, column 745, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...ssional individual but also as a human. Thats why I keep in my mind that turning inci...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, hence, however, if, nevertheless, so, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1908.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63106796117 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82100238958 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543689320388 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.514922663 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.2 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4666666667 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158536582338 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0546683281297 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490472394922 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108339806201 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449973390327 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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