Every country establishes the zoo for various purposes and it is valuable. A zoo plays a substantial role in our life. In the zoo all sort of the wild animal, birds, reptile etc are available and people enjoy the visiting on the zoo. Some people think that zoo has no value in our life. while other people penchant that zoo has a more useful purpose. From my vantage point, I disagree with author statement that zoo has no useful purpose because of the zoo is the best place for entertainment, people can see the animal life and rare species of birds and wild animal, and help to preserve some rare species and protect from the extinction.
To begin with, most kids are enjoying to visiting the zoo and it helps to the children to understand the animal life. A variety of the animals, birds, reptiles are not seen in the routine life. For example, my younger brother last time went to the zoo and he was the first time sees the alligator and very curious to see the alligator because of alligator not we see in the local place and its present in the rare place which is not possible that kids see them. Besides, people are also enjoying with natural birds and animal. I also visit the zoo couple of time over the years, that place I feel the more peaceful environment and chirping birds make me more ecstatic.
Furthermore, in the zoo, many types of animals are preserved and caring by the member of the zoo. A lots animal must have to need the protection from the extinction and the zoo is an important role for caring and breeding some species. For instance, the American most famous passenger pigeon was needed to protection from the hunting and extinction. If, the zoo preserve the male passenger pigeon then, the female pigeon could breed but it not happen because of no male found for the breed cause the extinction of the passenger pigeon. Therefore, the zoo is important for the animal life.
In brief, contemplating aforementioned reasons zoo is one kind of entertainment and kids can get the knowledge about the animal life, people have also enjoyed the zoo and it should require for protect some animal species to extinction. Therefore, I refute the writer statement that a zoo has no useful purpose.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 288, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: While
...hink that zoo has no value in our life. while other people penchant that zoo has a mo...
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Line 1, column 288, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “while” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...hink that zoo has no value in our life. while other people penchant that zoo has a mo...
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Line 3, column 444, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'happens'?
Suggestion: happens
...he female pigeon could breed but it not happen because of no male found for the breed ...
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Line 4, column 40, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'reasons'' or 'reason's'?
Suggestion: reasons'; reason's
... In brief, contemplating aforementioned reasons zoo is one kind of entertainment and ki...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, so, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in brief, kind of, sort of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1826.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64631043257 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4807189848 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.445292620865 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 586.8 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.1822728653 48.9658058833 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.444444444 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8333333333 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.22222222222 5.45110844103 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176109877247 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0739282271279 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0772045134635 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125635554968 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.069499982049 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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