As the advertisement is one of the most efficient ways for ceiling a product by catching the customer eyes. Personally, though, the effect of the advertisement on the children (aged two to five) shouldn't be allowed. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, the advertisement through the eyes is highly effective since the image of the product will be the most remembered in the customer mind. Through the TV advertisement, when the customer having an idea about the product through the eye, the image of it would be saved in the mind. That causing the quick buying of the product since the eye falling on it.
First of all, from the previous explanation about the advertisement through the TV. For a children (aged two to five) the advertisement would be so harmful. The child always coping the acts in front of him without thinking. For example, the Spider man advertisement has affected badly on the children since they copping the act by standing on their window trying to fly. That would kill them if they fall through the window.
Secondly, the food advertisement such as chocolate is more common and the children always going to buy it. The tooth decay would be caused by eating too much amount of it. Chewing the gum is another example for the tooth decaying food. The advertisement for the food is a plenty one that cause a harmful disease for the children should be prevented.
Finally, all the children advertisement should be prevented in order to safe them from the harmful disease. The movies that talking about the super heroes should be one of the prevented movies from the children eyes. The children always repeat what said to them. The things that could be harmful on the children health or could be damaged on their way of thinking should be under control.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...sement on the children aged two to five shouldnt be allowed. I feel this way for two rea...
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... for the children should be prevented. Finally, all the children advertisement ...
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...ildren always repeat what said to them. The things that could be harmful on the chi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, for example, i feel, such as, talking about, first of all, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 13.8261648746 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1520.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 319.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76489028213 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61888915366 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479623824451 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 441.0 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 11.0 3.08781362007 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.0437096906 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.0 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7894736842 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190272814194 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0673930931956 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656265486544 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112141364531 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0414671063508 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.86 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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