Many people believe that newcomers should take part in the traditional activities of places where they landed in. While those actions could have some benefits, I believe that traditional participation should depend on foreigners.
On the one hand, follow the traditional practices can have some profound effect on newcomers' lives. Firsty, obbeying the native rules could prevent outsiders from getting unnecessary problems. Since there are some behaviors or deeds that might be considered as rude in some places, as a result, foreigners could get away from many troubles if they acknowledge these unnamed laws. For example, tourists who visit India should use their right hand when eating because using left hand is prohibited here. Secondly, participate in native customs is a good way to becomes closer with local people. By joining together with natives, newcomers can show their respects toward local cultural heritage, which may earns residents' hospitality in return.
On the other hand, I believe that outsiders should have the right to do whatever they want. Firstly, get involved in traditional customs could have some potential problems that detrimental affect strangers' health. For example, Asian countries are usually known for their diverse cuisines and many of the dishes might be toxic or allergen for newcomers. So to prevent tourists from getting food poisoning, many local authorities suggest that newcomers should aware of what they eat. In addition, many traditions or customs might not suitable for foreigners. Some of the native practices are even considered as inappropriate or bizarre in foreigners' point of views. Therefore, outsiders should be free to choose what traditional activities they want to participate.
In conclusion, while the participation of non-native residents in native customs can have some benefits, I believe that it should be up to their choices.
- The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age. 73
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- The bar chart below shows the reasons for internet usage among British adults(2001) 78
- The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English home. 76
- People who live in foreign countries should follow the traditions and customs. To what extent do you agree or disagree. 56
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 503, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
...toms might not suitable for foreigners. Some of the native practices are even considered as...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1405.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 259.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42471042471 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83961019432 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.748482965 49.4020404114 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 87.8125 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1875 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129018968175 0.244688304435 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0461350831766 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452550188345 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.080289449352 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0383476724976 0.056905535591 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.86 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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