TPO-40 - Independent Writing Task Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

As a matter of fact, going to school and getting high grades is the most important thing student's life. Parents use different ways to teach their children some basic rules such as being on time in the class or getting good grades in each lesson. Some parents prefer to encourage their kids by getting money and some of them prefer other ways. Each way has some advantages and disadvantages. In my view, offering money to school age children is a good idea to improve their level in school.

First and foremost, it can help them to improve their ability to study. It is a simple way to encourage kids for getting better grades. For instance, some high schools in Irvine started to make rules for parents in order to increase the efficiency in student's lessons. They tried several ways and finally, they found out that the best way to increase student's level is offering some gift cards to the best person in each class. They published their research'result in a local newspaper three years ago.

Second of all, offering some money for a better grade will help student to be familiar with the atmosphere in the job market. Indeed, children have no idea about the whole job things. School age children need to be familiar with making money. They should know that if they want a bigger plate, they should work harder.

Last but not least, young adult will find out how to have a plan for their expenses. Many parents prefer to put money on table for their children any way. Consequently, their children cannot manage their money in the future. On the other hand, some parents prefer to teach their young students to be responsible for each dollar. Obviously, the second group will put some rules and limits for spending money, because they want to teach their children how to decrease their consumption and how to manage their packet. This way of money offering will help them to do it faster. For instance, I used to have the same money plan in my school age years and my parents taught me how to have a small book with myself to keep my expenses. They Also had another notebook for my grades and kept them accurately. After a while, I learned a lot by these simple methods. I have always been a good accountant in my life.

To sum up, although some parents prefer to spend lots of money for their children without any calculating, putting some money as a gift for a better score will help students to have a better life in future.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 197, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ill help students to have a better life in future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, if, second, so, while, for instance, such as, as a matter of fact, in my view, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2004.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59633027523 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30747167987 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.44495412844 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.5563818516 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.16 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.44 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.92 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.362799224718 0.236089414692 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113415680609 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0660441684914 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228374924819 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0810583900546 0.0645574589148 126% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.1 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.65 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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