The pie charts give information on the proportion of population in South Korea in 2000 and 2050.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Given two pie charts indicate the percentage of population in South Korea in 2000 and 2050 by classifying in age group.
As clearly seen from the first chart, 40~59 years group show the highest firuge of 42%, which is almost 4 times of over 60 years. It is easily observed that over 60 years group reached lowest percentage with 10% and there are only 6% gap with 0~19 years group. Difference between younger and older group is only 3% and it represents that population is balanced.
When it comes to second one, there are significant increase in over 60 and 40~59 by 9% and 3% each. In contrast, 0~19 group decreased to 7% and due to drastic fall, this age group recorded smallest figure. So, it is certain that older people increased dramatically in 2050 approximately 11% more than 2000.
Overall, by the time goes, the proportion of older people rose apparently and that can lead serious aging society problems.
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Essay evaluation report
in age group.
in age groups.
40~59 years group show the highest firuge
40~59 years group shows the highest figure
reached lowest percentage
reached the lowest percentage
there are significant increase
there are significant increases
there is a significant increase
this age group recorded smallest figure.
this age group recorded the smallest figure.
in 2050 approximately 11% more than 2000.
in 2050 approximately 11% more than that in 2000.
Sentence: As clearly seen from the first chart, 4059 years group show the highest firuge of 42, which is almost 4 times of over 60 years.
Error: firuge Suggestion: fire
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
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Don't need to make comments for IELTS task I:
the proportion of older people rose apparently and that can lead serious aging society problems.
maybe it is going to make a better life.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 8 10
No. of Words: 164 200
No. of Characters: 725 1000
No. of Different Words: 103 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.579 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.421 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.569 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 41 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 32 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 22 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 14 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 3.428 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.418 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.706 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.075 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 178, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'reached the lowest'.
Suggestion: reached the lowest
...asily observed that over 60 years group reached lowest percentage with 10% and there are only ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, first, if, second, so, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 765.0 965.302439024 79% => OK
No of words: 160.0 196.424390244 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78125 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55655882008 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50897607352 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 102.0 106.607317073 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6375 0.547539520022 116% => OK
syllable_count: 216.0 283.868780488 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.114634146341 872% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 12.6435507275 43.030603864 29% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 95.625 112.824112599 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 22.9334400587 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 5.23603664747 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101843277269 0.215688989381 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0515625695 0.103423049105 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0793063138096 0.0843802449381 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0862242745705 0.15604864568 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.096591144725 0.0819641961636 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.2329268293 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 61.2550243902 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 11.4140731707 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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