The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Given line graph illustrates the changing size of sector which used water globally by using km unit between 1900 and 2000. In addtion, table give us an information how water consumed in two countries, Brazil and Democratic Republic of Congo in 2000.
In the case of line graph, there are no variation with dominant position in order of Agriculture, Industrial use and Domestic use. All graphs increase gradually until 1940 but from 1950, huge increase starts in Agriculture section and that pick the highest point with figure 3000. Also, industrial use shows similar trend but much smaller than first one. Domestic use illustrates steady increase through out whole period but still couldn't reach 1000. Therefore, most outstanding diffrence of water consumption are causing by Agriculture.
When it comes to table, significant difference between two countries can be shown. Brazil's population is almost 3 times of Congo with 176 million. Moreover, water consumption per person is 40 times of Congo. We can recognize that those apparent gap in water consumption caused by agriculture as we mentioned in the first graph. Provided figure of Irrigated land can figure out above hypothesis with about 26400km gap.
Overall, in 2000, difference of figures which illustrates amount of used water help us to estimate irrigation development also population.
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Essay evaluation report
Given line graph illustrates the changing size of sector which used water globally
Given line graph illustrates the global water use by sectors //be simple
In addtion, table give us an information how water consumed in two countries
In addition, the table gives us information on how water is consumed in two countries
there are no variation with dominant position
there are no variations with dominant positions
and that pick the highest point
and that picks the highest point
industrial use shows similar trend
industrial use shows the similar trend
Therefore, most outstanding diffrence of water consumption are causing by Agriculture.
Therefore, the most outstanding difference of water consumption is caused by Agriculture.
those apparent gap in water consumption caused by agriculture
those apparent gaps in water consumption are caused by agriculture
Overall, in 2000, difference of figures which illustrates amount of used water help us
Overall, in 2000, the difference of figures which illustrates the amount of used water help us
Sentence: In addtion, table give us an information how water consumed in two countries, Brazil and Democratic Republic of Congo in 2000.
Error: addtion Suggestion: addition
Sentence: Domestic use illustrates steady increase through out whole period but still couldn't reach 1000.
Error: couldn Suggestion: could
Sentence: Therefore, most outstanding diffrence of water consumption are causing by Agriculture.
Error: diffrence Suggestion: difference
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
you have issues on singular/plural, and articles (a, an, the)
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 13 10
No. of Words: 214 200
No. of Characters: 1109 1000
No. of Different Words: 140 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.825 4.0
Average Word Length: 5.182 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.733 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 75 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 61 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.462 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.766 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.538 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.342 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.568 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.108 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 397, Rule ID: THROUGH_OUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'throughout'?
Suggestion: throughout
...omestic use illustrates steady increase through out whole period but still couldnt reach 10...
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Line 3, column 432, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...ease through out whole period but still couldnt reach 1000. Therefore, most outstanding...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, still, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 3.97073170732 378% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1144.0 965.302439024 119% => OK
No of words: 213.0 196.424390244 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37089201878 4.92477711251 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82027741392 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76796299962 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 106.607317073 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.68544600939 0.547539520022 125% => OK
syllable_count: 348.3 283.868780488 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.114634146341 872% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.4891757707 43.030603864 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0 112.824112599 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3846153846 22.9334400587 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.23603664747 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24200036929 0.215688989381 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0807083664489 0.103423049105 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616588033956 0.0843802449381 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146322204871 0.15604864568 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0621945765205 0.0819641961636 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.2329268293 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 61.2550243902 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.57 11.4140731707 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.06136585366 112% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 40.7170731707 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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