Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.
Recently, some athletes has been in the spotlight due to their too high annual income. Sometimes, those money causes issue which says it is unfair. But i think it is reasonable enough to earn much money than that of the other professions.
Some people who argue this is unfair insist that receiving pension is not acceptable even they do not enter competition anymore. Athletes receive pension after retirement for some reasons such as contribution, medals and so on. Commonly other professions do not have any pension plan like athletes. For example, gold medalists can enjoy their later years by using pension they get while the other field's retired people look for a new job or chores.
However, earning much money is a result of their efforts. Every single athlete get different amount of money which is priced based on fame, skills of a person. Moreover, when a player win international competition, they represents our country also soar national prestige. Pension is a kind of reward for above contribution and it is justified. For example, Macey is one of the best soccer player in the world. He earn a lot of money but no one claim that because he always leads his team to win. It is his name value and result of his sustained effort. Therefore, we can say that it is fair enough athletes to get big money. In addition, as they much they earn, they spend a lot of money for training and buying new gear to get better score with their games. Actually, in the case of sports, needed way more money to be trained than that of the other fields. Some Athlets use prize money they have got for next competition preparation. So we can say that money they have got can be a essential option to keep exercise.
To sum up, it is clear that athletes do not earn more money easily than the other people also it is fully reasonable. Hopefully, every person whatever their major is earn appropriate amount of money as a reward of their hard efforts.
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Essay evaluation report
some athletes has been in the spotlight due to their too high annual income.
some athletes have been in the spotlights due to their high annual income.
Every single athlete get different amount of money
Every single athlete gets different amount of money
when a player win international competition,
when a player wins an international competition,
they represents our country also soar national prestige
it represents our country also soars national prestige
Macey is one of the best soccer player in the world
Macey is one of the best soccer players in the world //one of nouns
He earn a lot of money but no one claim that
He earns a lot of money but no one claims that
as they much they earn
as much as they earn
buying new gear to get better score
buying new gears to get better scores
can be a essential option
can be an essential option
than the other people
than other people
every person whatever their major is earn appropriate amount of money
every person whatever their major is earns appropriate amount of money
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 11 2 //Read a good grammar book about singular/plural
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.429 21.0 //make the sentences longer. Write more compound/complex sentences. This will make the Automated_readability_index higher.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 11 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 345 350
No. of Characters: 1560 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.31 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.522 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.363 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 97 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 61 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 40 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.429 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.816 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.619 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.31 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.463 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.097 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 99, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this money' or 'those moneys', 'those monies'?
Suggestion: this money; those moneys; those monies
...heir too high annual income. Sometimes, those money causes issue which says it is unfair. B...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 153, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...uses issue which says it is unfair. But i think it is reasonable enough to earn m...
^
Line 5, column 221, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'represent'
Suggestion: represent
...yer win international competition, they represents our country also soar national prestige...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 414, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'earns'.
Suggestion: earns
...the best soccer player in the world. He earn a lot of money but no one claim that be...
^^^^
Line 5, column 983, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...can say that money they have got can be a essential option to keep exercise. T...
^
Line 7, column 167, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'earned'.
Suggestion: earned
...y, every person whatever their major is earn appropriate amount of money as a reward...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, while, for example, i think, in addition, kind of, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1610.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 345.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66666666667 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49217047443 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550724637681 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.8061849887 49.4020404114 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.6666666667 106.682146367 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4285714286 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38095238095 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259254806315 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0784065792697 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0854636535818 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181687954467 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0448743999515 0.056905535591 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 13.0946893788 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.51 12.4159519038 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.