Some people say that what children watch on TV influences their behaviour while others say the amount of time children they spend watching Tv influences their behavior.
In recent decades have witnessed an increase in Media usage, raising many questions of negative repercussions on children’s behaviours. Although the idea suggesting that the amount of time spent for watching Television impacts their behaviours, I think that the content on television is the main factor.
On the one hand, There are a myriad of reasons why the television’s content afflicts children’s behaviours. First, A constant exposure to some horror and criminal psychology-related movies would be conductive to some mental impairments in preschoolers due to their high degree of obssession. This would be instrumental in the causation of some mental impairments, reducing their interaction with the outside world. Second, Due to some misconceptions in children’s perception, they usually have a propensity to minick exactly what is depicted on some television’s movies and advertisements. For example, some inappropriate sexual and violent materials would act as an incentive for commiting felonies in young individuals such as sexual battery and homocide.
On the other hand, the time spending for television usage could also be fraught with negative consequences in terms of children behaviours. First, A large amount of time consumed for watching Television would be invariably associated with a reduction in family bonding due to an insufficiency in interaction with family members. This could act as a considerable contributor to children’s aggression and hostility towards other individuals, increasing the of their bullying and mugging in educational institutions. In addition, Too much time spent for watching television could culminate in the likelihood of isolation from modern society because of an inadequacy in time to participating in outdoors activities. This could culminate in the dispositions to timidity and reservedness in young people in order to engage in a real friendship, increasing the risk of autism.
In conclusion, I think that inappropriate X-rated and violent content would lead to some undesirable influences on bahaviours pertaining to crime commission and interaction reduction in younger generation . The official authorities and parents are highly-recommended to undetake some initiatives to reduce their exposures and prohibit these materials on mainstream media.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, second, so, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2009.0 1615.20841683 124% => OK
No of words: 340.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.90882352941 5.12529762239 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.63461787628 2.80592935109 130% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529411764706 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 629.1 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.8845794508 49.4020404114 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 143.5 106.682146367 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2857142857 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.21428571429 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219735921371 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747551008275 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0343146002334 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128195607072 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0226765572939 0.056905535591 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 13.0946893788 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 21.74 50.2224549098 43% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.29 12.4159519038 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.17 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 78.4519038076 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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