There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music ? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays ?
Today, we have so many different kinds of music in the world. As far as I am concerned, music is something that we needs, no matter it is traditional or international music because both of them are important.
We, absolutely, need music in our live. It can release our stress from our daily activity and gives us more energy to keep doing whatever we do. Everybody in the world love music, but they have their own favorite music. The elderly usually like the old and traditional music. Meanwhile, young people nowadays tend to like international music.
The international music that we heard everywhere is more easy listening and the beat is represents “the young soul” but the traditional one is bored and “too old”. These are what people may think about those two kinds of music. There is no a kind of music that more important than the other kind. We need to listen to the traditional music so we can remember where we come from and show to the world that we have a unique kind of music. We also need to listen to the international one so we can explore and know more about the other kinds of music or even make new kind of music.
Old tradition might be bored and new things might be interesting, but we need to know that we could not separate them. There will be no new things if we do not have the old one. Just like music. The new kind(s) of music must be came from the traditional one that added by something else. When we forget the old one, we will never know how history of music began.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 20, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
Today, we have so many different kinds of music in the world. As far as ...
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Line 1, column 117, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'we' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'need'
Suggestion: need
...m concerned, music is something that we needs, no matter it is traditional or interna...
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Line 5, column 259, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...bout those two kinds of music. There is no a kind of music that more important tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, while, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1246.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.46594982079 5.12529762239 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48586916062 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 176.041082164 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.487455197133 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 407.7 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.76152304609 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.888363978 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.2941176471 106.682146367 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4117647059 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.23529411765 7.06120827912 32% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.529812477487 0.244688304435 217% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.217069632929 0.084324248473 257% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0906726130548 0.0667982634062 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.369866806021 0.151304729494 244% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0899614042837 0.056905535591 158% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 13.0946893788 60% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.35 12.4159519038 67% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.18 8.58950901804 72% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 78.4519038076 40% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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