Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In the preceeding argument, the author claims that the declining population of arctic deer in Canada can be attributed to global warming. The argument seems to be quite plausible at first glance; however, a closer review sheds light on a plethora of facts that require concrete evidence for support.
To begin with, the author only adduces reports from local hunters that arctic deer population is shrinking. It is not clear whether these reports are validated and reliable. Experienced as the hunters are, there are still many factors that affect the obversation and counting of arctic deers. That hunters encounter fewer deers does not necessarily mean that the population of arctic deer is actually decreasing. To draw this conclusion wifh confidence, evidence must be gathered by a methodical and scieitific investigation carried out by professional ecologists.
What is more, even if the number of arctic deers in Canada has witnessed a decline in the past, the true real causes of this phenomenon still remain elusive. The author believes that the deer population dwindled due to global warming simply based on the concurrence of these two events. This is problematic because it lacks both logic and evidence. it is not impossible that the deer population is suffering a drop just because it is over-hunted. So additional evidence need to be collected to support this claim, although global warming may well serve as a factor contributing to the dying of deers.
Last but not least, warmer environment can exert multifarious influence on the survival of arctic deers, unble to migrate between islands through ice on the sea being one of them. Meanwhile, global warming is likely to play other roles, like making the plants that arctic deers feed on more scarce, which absolutely dinimishes the deer population. Therefore, it is ungrounded to assert that globle warming endangers arctic deers by restricting their mobility across the sea.
In conclusion, while global warming appears to be a compelling player in the declining population of arctic deer in Canada, the analysis and statements are not supported by evidence offered in the passage. More endavours are expected to figure out whether arctic deers are really dying out and what are the reasons leading to this.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 350, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, may, really, so, still, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, to begin with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1921.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 368.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22010869565 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7719082962 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554347826087 0.468620217663 118% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.471057884232 212% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.6971143374 57.8364921388 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.0 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6470588235 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35294117647 5.70786347227 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193727809235 0.218282227539 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0615932420462 0.0743258471296 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0416593765917 0.0701772020484 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111428744824 0.128457276422 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0487194306569 0.0628817314937 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 98.500998004 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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