People have always been concerned about choosing their career in history. In fact, some people think choose a job that is similar to their parents is better and the rest of them think otherwise. As everybody knows, each way has some advantages and disadvantages. I personally prefer to have my own job instead of following my parent's career.
First and foremost, people especially young adults need to be independent. Nobody wants to be dependent on another person. A student, who choose to be in the same major as his or her parents, is choosing to be dependent on them, because it is impossible to have a same job without using their space, experience or equipment. For instance, my cousin was genius and he decided to continue his education in another country, but his parents persuade him to stay and continue their family job. They had a big lot and they were selling their products annually. After a while, he decided to stay and he started to think how he can be successful without his parent's help. Surprisingly, he found out that he has to ask too many questions about every single thing from his parents and it was a bummer for him. He had a dream to be on his feet, but he could not reach that, because he listened to his parent's advice and he left his personal dream. Unfortunately, he was not successful in his life, because he had to do something that he does not like and he did not know that before. He did not know that he has to be in the same area. In another word, he has not ever thought that way.
Second, in many cases parent's career is not interesting for children. Young adults want to be creative. They have many new ideas and they want to start something attractive. In the case of following their parent's career, they cannot be satisfied at all, because they have to listen to their parent's advice and it is boring for many children. Consequently, children cannot be successful in their life.
Third, it is nice to get a complete business right away, but in most times, children cannot understand the value of that business. Psychologically, people will love something that they spend time for it. They cannot find a value of others' businesses. Culturally, in some countries such as Iran, parents donate their business to their child, but in other countries like United States, parents sell their business when they think that they cannot work that hard. In the first case, children have no idea about the whole business and they ruin the job quickly.
To sum up, giving a prepare job opportunity to a child, who has no knowledge in that area is not only bad for his or her personality, but also is harmful for the business, because there is a huge possibility to destroy the company really fast.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 19, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... the job quickly. To sum up, giving a prepare job opportunity to a child, who has no ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, really, second, so, third, while, as to, for instance, in fact, such as, in many cases, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 76.0 43.0788530466 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2253.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 486.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63580246914 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58149447069 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465020576132 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 702.0 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.3158360325 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.6538461538 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6923076923 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11538461538 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216451054529 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0656475256371 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700040981622 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14120381962 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0612430455573 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.06 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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