Over the past few decades, world has changed and a lot of events are occurring. Some of them have influence on our life but many of them have not. I am in favor of the opinion that there is no need for people to be aware of events which happen around the globe. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following paragraph.
To begin with, people are extremely busy and have not enough time. So they cannot allocate their time to know about the events. If they have time, they will prefer to spend it with their families and relatives or get relax. My own experiences demonstrates this concept. As a doctor who has a hectic life and spend most of the time in hospital, Whenever I find time, I would rather get relax and distance from my problems and work rather that watching television and surfing internet in order to get information about the events happening in the world.
Moreover, a vast majority of event which take place in the world are about the sad news including war, natural disaster and so on. Listening to this kind of events are not good Since all of us have difficulties in our life and do not want to be conscious about this type of news. Let me illustrates this with one of my experiences. As a doctor who as busy as a bee, everyday I meet a lot of people with incurable disease specially children and because of that my spirit is not really good. So knowing bad events make me depressed.
In conclusion, it is not important to know the events since people are busy and most of the events are depressing. Whether they are relevant to our life or not.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, really, so, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1300.0 1977.66487455 66% => OK
No of words: 298.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.36241610738 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41714183672 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53355704698 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 423.9 618.680645161 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.3578922722 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.25 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.625 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215556180186 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069851540768 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0357235212554 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135265136737 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0175301863296 0.0645574589148 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.01 10.9000537634 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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