In preceeding argument, the author states that shorter sleep time for advertising executives may lead to higher profit for the company, adducing a study covering 300 male and female participants. While at first glance the analysis seems to be quite plausible, a closer scrutiny sheds light on a plethora of assumptions that could undermine the valuation of the argument.
To begin with, we do not know how representative are the people involved in the study, and it is reckless for the author to assume that the study is reliable. The average number of hours for sleep per night can be affected by multifarious factors, but none of them were discussed in the argument. For instance, older people tend to sleep less, so age must be considered when choosing the 300 male and female. In addition, how the data was collected in the study remains elusive. As people hardly record their sleep time precisely, the results presented in the study would be flawed if no special method was used to calculate the average time for sleep.
What is more, even if the study is reliable enough, this does not necessarily indicate that the results are sufficiently promising to be taken seriously. Particularly, the author only mentions the positive correlation between shorter sleep hours and higher profit and faster growth, whereas no further information is given regarding with how strong the correlation is. If the relationship found in the study is so weak that it has little practical meaning, then it would be futile for any advertising firm to have executives who sleep less.
Last but not least, the recommendation above for hiring people who need shorter sleep hours is based on an assumption that sleep hours in some way reflect the ability to be an executive. Nonetheless, although this relationship is revealed by the study, it might simply be ostensible and may not be a causal relationship, makign understanding true attributes that make good leaders crucially important. It is possible that people requiring less sleep are more likely to worker longer, so it would be more beneficial for advertising companies to hire hard-working people, instead of those spend most of their time playind and relaxing.
In conclusion, advertising firms ought to find and hire executives that are more likely to bring prosperity and profit, but the recommendation proffered in the business magazine are rife with ungrounded assumptions. Therefore, it is not convincing in showing that having executives who averagely need less than 6 hours for sleep is are desired leaders.
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- TPO-30 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use spec 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 105, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...t necessarily indicate that the results are sufficiently promising to be taken seriously. Particularly, th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, nonetheless, regarding, so, then, therefore, whereas, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2149.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 419.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12887828162 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88959688631 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 204.123752495 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54415274463 0.468620217663 116% => OK
syllable_count: 676.8 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.471057884232 425% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.3270861532 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.266666667 119.503703932 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9333333333 23.324526521 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0666666667 5.70786347227 176% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228721741177 0.218282227539 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0820060296434 0.0743258471296 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0612228240512 0.0701772020484 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132451007365 0.128457276422 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.021227633406 0.0628817314937 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 14.3799401198 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 98.500998004 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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