It is agreeable in some sense, that company management has come up with routine check and surveillance around the employees for some favorable purposes. However, to support the clause the company management has given evidence or cite that it will eventually reduce the waste of resources cunningly fabricated as time, system capacity and some time eventually from lawsuit too. Despite lot of facts and supporting clauses author doesn't make cogent remark to come to coda as referred in paraphrase. So the statement has to be checked or verified with some substantial facts and reasoning which will lead us to effectively come to conclusion. In clear state, author statement is rife with holes of unquestioned remarks and unstated beliefs attested to it.
First of all, as stated in paraphrase company management has come up with solution of regularly monitoring of their resources; was there any incident before which laid company management to come up with this solution ? where there any more solutions discussed ? How regular monitoring will help to reduce the wastage of resources -There are plenty of concerns which are failed to be addressed in the topic. It has been proved and stated by many sociologist that amount of freedom you give to your employees will lead commensurate amount of proliferate yield. Employees would most time would not accept such a policy in salubrious manner, as it would lead to the feeling of confinement of there thoughts. There are lot of companies and organisation have failed to make cogent and recognizable outcomes after surveillance on their employees.
Addition to it, as cited in paraphrase that it would lead to improvement to time management of employees but was that proven or on what basis this fact is concluded is never mentioned in argument. As leading monitoring to the e-mail will lead additional efforts on employer that can be resource or automated program. This would unlikely will raise overall budget of the organisation. In overall paraphrase, it was not stated with due expound that how come it will add to system capacity. Although, it may be true stated paraphrase is true but it does not give convincing amount of facts to prove the statement rather it has been concluded on surmise.
To support the clause, it would have been beneficial if cited that what lead the to think about this approach. Was there any even in past which raised a flag to take this step. Or this steps properly evaluated before. Monitoring on the employees would not lead good outcome as by mutual human tendency , but there are some approaches company can maneuver to mitigate such problems in future.
One of them would be to add whistle blowing culture in organisation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 429, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... of facts and supporting clauses author doesnt make cogent remark to come to coda as r...
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Line 3, column 220, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Where
...agement to come up with this solution ? where there any more solutions discussed ? Ho...
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Line 3, column 441, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun sociologist seems to be countable; consider using: 'many sociologists'.
Suggestion: many sociologists
...topic. It has been proved and stated by many sociologist that amount of freedom you give to your...
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Line 7, column 302, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...good outcome as by mutual human tendency , but there are some approaches company c...
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Line 7, column 382, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... can maneuver to mitigate such problems in future. One of them would be to add whistl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, so, as to, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 58.6224719101 131% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2269.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 449.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05345211581 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76949709219 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487750556793 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 728.1 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.740449438202 270% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.042110577 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.047619048 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.380952381 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.52380952381 5.21951772744 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243015260318 0.243740707755 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0641480297677 0.0831039109588 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643477809802 0.0758088955206 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118322657944 0.150359130593 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0738461242039 0.0667264976115 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 100.480337079 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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