Our comunity is considered one of the most important aspects of our lives. The comunity is the place that we live in the whole time. It is aslo considered the city for our childern in the future. Some people I am sure would believe that young people nowadays give enough time to help their communities, others would disagree. However, when it comes to me I definitely agree with young people do not give special time for their society for two main reasons. I will demonstrate my ideas in the following pragraphs.
The first main reason is that young people have very limited time. We can see our young prople are always busy with their activities. Some of them used to go school every day, others have their family life. Moreover, most of them has many tasks every day should be done. For example, in my personal case I am working full time and I have a young daughter, she is four years old. I am always busy with her. In isntance, she has swimming calsses two days a week, ballet sessions once a week, and i have to help her to finish her homework every day. Moreover, I have a lot of ot tasks I have to get it done for my husband and my family. So, I do not have extra time to participate at any activities to help my comunity.
In addition, all young peolpe have their own interests. Many young people are more interested to paly and have fun more than getting involved at any meeting or any issuess are realated to the city. For example, last week the rental office sent us invitation to attent meeting. This letter states that the complex is going to built a new library to help the students and plant more trees to decrease the air pollution. However, many residents in my comunity ignored this meeting and it ended up that just three person attended that event. This experience taught me that young people like us nowadays have they own plans and they are not aiming to help their society.
In sum, thought some people may oppose the idea, young people do not give time to their communities. Not only they are so busy with their life activities but aslo they have different interset. I believe that young people should spend more time to help the society.
Our comunity is considered one of the most important aspects of our lives. The comunity is the place that we live in the whole time. It is aslo considered the city for our childern in the future. Some people I am sure would believe that young people nowadays give enough time to help their communities, others would disagree. However, when it comes to me I definitely agree with young people do not give special time for their society for two main reasons. I will demonstrate my ideas in the following pragraphs.
The first main reason is that young people have very limited time. We can see our young prople are always busy with their activities. Some of them used to go school every day, others have their family life. Moreover, most of them has many tasks every day should be done. For example, in my personal case I am working full time and I have a young daughter, she is four years old. I am always busy with her. In isntance, she has swimming calsses two days a week, ballet sessions once a week, and i have to help her to finish her homework every day. Moreover, I have a lot of ot tasks I have to get it done for my husband and my family. So, I do not have extra time to participate at any activities to help my comunity.
In addition, all young peolpe have their own interests. Many young people are more interested to paly and have fun more than getting involved at any meeting or any issuess are realated to the city. For example, last week the rental office sent us invitation to attent meeting. This letter states that the complex is going to built a new library to help the students and plant more trees to decrease the air pollution. However, many residents in my comunity ignored this meeting and it ended up that just three person attended that event. This experience taught me that young people like us nowadays have they own plans and they are not aiming to help their society.
In sum, thought some people may oppose the idea, young people do not give time to their communities. Not only they are so busy with their life activities but aslo they have different interset. I believe that young people should spend more time to help the society.
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- Our comunity is considered one of the most important aspects of our lives. The comunity is the place that we live in the whole time. It is aslo considered the city for our childern in the future. Some people I am sure would believe that young people nowad 66
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 318, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...ample, in my personal case I am working full time and I have a young daughter, she is fo...
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Line 3, column 331, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...personal case I am working full time and I have a young daughter, she is four yea...
^^
Line 5, column 326, Rule ID: GOING_TO_VBD[1]
Message: 'Going to' requires the base form: 'build'
Suggestion: build
...ter states that the complex is going to built a new library to help the students and ...
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Line 5, column 511, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'person' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'people', 'persons'.
Suggestion: people; persons
...meeting and it ended up that just three person attended that event. This experience ta...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, for example, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1777.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48737373737 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29639055935 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497474747475 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 578.7 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.1466906885 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.0416666667 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.83333333333 5.45110844103 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34721579257 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113134853525 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.145984309919 0.0737576698707 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250623066914 0.150856017488 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.23346390748 0.0645574589148 362% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 11.7677419355 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.47 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.06 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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