It is no doubt that choosing a suitable job is crucial for children which is also a big trouble. Though some think it is a good idea to follow their parents, however, in my point of view, it depends on children’s interests and the need of society to choose their jobs.
To begin with, no one can insist on a job which takes oneself more than ten years or even a whole life’s time without interests. If you don’t love your job, even you have a high salary, it is sure that you cannot do it well thus you have to give up after many times of failure. Take my brother, Li as an example. After graduated, he became an employee who worked in a large company which his father also worked in. Though the payment is good, he always felt boring because he couldn’t show off his talents in such a huge company that everything is unchangeable. Finally, he had to quit this job and built his own company to achieve his dream. So choosing jobs that are similar to parents’ jobs is quite unwise for wasting one’s talent without considering one’s interests.
Moreover, some parents’ jobs are not necessary in the modern society. With the high improvement of science and technology, various of jobs are taken place by robots or other new jobs. For instance, many car factories need lots of workers to assemble cars many years ago. However, what they need now is just some robots which never feel tired or hungry. What’s more, without payment for robots, the owners of many factories do not need workers any more. According to a research by the Peking University, more than one hundred of jobs will disappear in the following thirty years. So if you still insist on your parent’s jobs, soon you will find there’s no need for your job.
Admittedly, following your parents’ jobs gives you more facilities for you learn a lot of experience from them. So you can adapt to the job more quickly than normal fresher. But without any interests, any difficulty that you face up can cause you give up in a large possibility. And not to say when your parents’ job is discarded by the society, how can you preset it forever?
For the aforementioned ground, I firmly believe it is unwise for a young adult to choose a job similar to their parents’, especially when considering he has no interests or the job is outdated.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 477, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...not need workers any more. According to a research by the Peking University, more than one...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, moreover, so, still, thus, well, for instance, no doubt, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1960.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73429951691 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79164779175 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531400966184 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 612.9 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.6242311076 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.3333333333 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7142857143 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.90476190476 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.432996401173 0.236089414692 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140803366942 0.076458572812 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108223633654 0.0737576698707 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.277666407307 0.150856017488 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0353895043772 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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