It is no doubt that the world had undergone great changes that need a different view of jobs. In my opinion, there are some jobs truly need to be done quickly, but not all the jobs need this change. I will express my idea using specific examples.
To begin with, in the fields of science, it is important to work quickly and scientists do not care about mistakes. For scientists, competition in the same fields is common that it forced scientists to work faster than others. If they are later which means other scientists first publish thesis, what they have done that sometimes means ten years’ effort is almost useless. Like the most famous scientists, Newtown was believed as the father of calculous. In fact, it is different from the calculous we used today which invented by Leibniz who is just some years later than Newtown. But it caused that we more familiar with Newtown than Leibniz. What’s more, making mistakes is acceptable because no theories are perfect in the first time without any one’s revise.
Then, working quickly is also important when accounts for commerce. In the modern society, a successful merchant is the first one who get a good idea. Take Ma Yun as an instance. As the boss of Taobao, he is the richest person in China. Though there are various of competitors and even some offer better service than Taobao, no one can compare with Taobao in online shopmarketing. A possible and strong reason is that his web is the first when twenty years ago he had persist in it. Thus we have to admit that to be the first is the key factor to success in commerce.
However, not all jobs need to be worked quickly, especially some jobs which need patience like education. For example, when you face students who cannot study well, you have to care about these students with patience or they will lose confidence even give up study forever.
In a conclusion, whether need to work quickly even make mistakes depends on the jobs. Truly many jobs like scientists and merchants need the high working speed and it is acceptable to make mistakes, on the other hand, some jobs like teachers should put patience on the first.
- TOEFL T P O 40 Integrated Writing Task 65
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- TPO-20 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
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- TPO-40 - Integrated Writing Task Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. On the other hand, conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 469, Rule ID: HAD_VBP[1]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'persisted'.
Suggestion: persisted
... the first when twenty years ago he had persist in it. Thus we have to admit that to be...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 469, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'persisted'.
Suggestion: persisted
... the first when twenty years ago he had persist in it. Thus we have to admit that to be...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 484, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... twenty years ago he had persist in it. Thus we have to admit that to be the first i...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, then, thus, well, even so, for example, in fact, no doubt, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1787.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 376.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75265957447 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45936734155 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545212765957 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.2759295174 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.0952380952 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9047619048 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.71428571429 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187648090048 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0557704047809 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0558101180083 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0962677613255 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548351153106 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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