TPO 30
the reading and the lecturer are both about burning mirror. the author of the reading believes that it is just a myth and the Greeks never really built such a device. the lecturer casts doubt on the claims made in the article and brings up three reasons to reject the point in the reading passage.the first point the author makes is that Greeks were not technologically advanced enough to make such a device. it is mentioned that the technology for manufacturing a large sheet of copper did not exist in that time. the lecturer opposes this point by explaining the used dozen small pieces of wood to build large mirror.Secondly, the author contends that the burning mirror would have taken a long time to set the ships on fire. the article notes that burning mirror would therefore have been very impractical. the lecturer rebuts this argument. she suggests that wood is not the only thing that can be used in burning mirror. she thinks they used pitch which can catch fire very quickly.finally the author states that a burning mirror does not be an improvement on a weapon that Greeks already had. the article establishes that Greeks had no reason to build a weapon like a burning mirror. this concept is refused by the lecturer which asserts that if the enemy instead of familiar weapons watch a burning mirror, they are really surprised so it is very effective.in conclusion, the lecturer and the author appear to be in disagreement about a burning mirror being impractical. the author thinks it is just a myth which is contradicted by the lecturer.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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the reading and the lecturer are both about...
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...lecturer are both about burning mirror. the author of the reading believes that it ...
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...reeks never really built such a device. the lecturer casts doubt on the claims made...
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...reeks never really built such a device. the lecturer casts doubt on the claims made...
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... advanced enough to make such a device. it is mentioned that the technology for ma...
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...acturing a large sheet of copper did not exist in that time. the lecturer opposes...
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... of copper did not exist in that time. the lecturer opposes this point by explaini...
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...ll pieces of wood to build large mirror.Secondly, the author contends that the burning m...
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...n a long time to set the ships on fire. the article notes that burning mirror would...
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...d therefore have been very impractical. the lecturer rebuts this argument. she sugg...
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...cal. the lecturer rebuts this argument. she suggests that wood is not the only thin...
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...ing that can be used in burning mirror. she thinks they used pitch which can catch ...
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...y quickly.finally the author states that a burning mirror does not be an improvem...
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...nt on a weapon that Greeks already had. the article establishes that Greeks had no ...
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...o build a weapon like a burning mirror. this concept is refused by the lecturer whic...
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...out a burning mirror being impractical. the author thinks it is just a myth which i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 30.3222958057 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1286.0 1373.03311258 94% => OK
No of words: 269.0 270.72406181 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78066914498 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67243069554 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 145.348785872 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479553903346 0.540411800872 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 393.3 419.366225166 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.6838296007 49.2860985944 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.166666667 110.228320801 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4166666667 21.698381199 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.58333333333 7.06452816374 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.09492273731 24% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 16.0 4.19205298013 382% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 4.33554083885 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.426935340162 0.272083759551 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.167089749573 0.0996497079465 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101891011858 0.0662205650399 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.426935340162 0.162205337803 263% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.3589403974 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.2367328918 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.42419426049 86% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 63.6247240618 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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