One of the rigors of the modern hectic life is choosing an appropriate work schedule in order to have sufficient time for both your work and your personal life. Controversy exists over whether having a job with five days and shorter hours is far more efficient than three days of work with longer hours. I believe, however, working only three days a week for long hours enables people to have more hours of sheer happiness to spare and have more incentives to work hard.
The first aspect to point out is that working more hours in a few days provides people with an opportunity to feel delighted by more leisure time. What makes it more preferable is that you have more complete days to enjoy. Not only does working for longer days in fewer hours need more days of work, but also the days you are off are not completely yours. The comfort that you would have a full day for yourself gives you a sense of satisfaction. For instance, since you know you have some complete days to have fun , you call your friends to socialize with each other having tremendous hours of joy together.
A further more subtle point is that people who choose to work for fewer days in longer hours have more penchants to work hard. Knowing you will have some full days to spare motivates them to carry the heavy load of works in the hope of being refreshed by having various kinds of pleasure. Furthermore, since they know they should accomplish what they are assigned impeccably in order to have days off, they put all their efforts in the work no matter how many hours they should be tackling it, to make sure they will no longer come back to it again. Knowing you have many days though in shorter hours to accomplish a task undermines people's morale to work as diligently as a person who knows he can have it done in fewer days.
To summarize, it is highly beneficial to work only three days a week for long hours than having a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours since it provides more enjoyable spare time and strong motivation for people to work hard. It is high time we stopped overlooking the fact that employees prefer to work for less hours even though it takes longer days. What stimulates them to persevere is knowing you would have some days merely for yourself to spend it as wonderfully as you want .
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 516, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... you have some complete days to have fun , you call your friends to socialize with...
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Line 7, column 326, Rule ID: LESS_DOLLARSMINUTESHOURS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer hours'?
Suggestion: fewer hours
... fact that employees prefer to work for less hours even though it takes longer days. What ...
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Line 7, column 326, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun hours is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... fact that employees prefer to work for less hours even though it takes longer days....
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Line 7, column 405, Rule ID: NON_ACTION_CONTINUOUS[3]
Message: The verb know is usually not used with a continuous form, use the simple form instead. Suggestion: 'knows'
Suggestion: knows
...days. What stimulates them to persevere is knowing you would have some days merely for you...
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Line 7, column 405, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...days. What stimulates them to persevere is knowing you would have some days merely for you...
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Line 7, column 499, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...f to spend it as wonderfully as you want .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, so, for instance, in short, you know
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1899.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26788091935 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.450236966825 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 586.8 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.8422411457 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.6 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1333333333 20.6045352989 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73333333333 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214914052017 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105443045273 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0611927992358 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162674996339 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0703200855389 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.12 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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