Obviously, having some friends is an inevitable part of our life. We spend a considerable amount of our time with our friends such as at schools, at work. Some people would agree with the idea that it is more important to keep your old friends than to make new friends; others would disagree. In my view, making new friends would be more important than keeping our old friends for two important reasons.
First, making new friends helps us to learn some new experiences. If you just keep your old friends and not to make new friends, it would be obvious that you do not learn different kinds of experiences. For example, when I was studying computer in my master'd degree in university, which was an international university in my city. I had a lot of friends who could just knew English. But since I am so sociable. I made some new friends at the university from different countries with diversity of language and cultures. Two of my new frinds whose names were Nika and Jhon came from China and Franch. They knew chines and Franch. Both of them knew English two. So I learnt a lot of new things about their countries and about their cultures too. And above all, I know how to talk in Chines and Franch because of talking with them with thier native language. As you can see, if I had not made friends with them, I could not have talked in two different languages.
Second, you have to make new friends. We live in a modern era. We can communicate with a lot of people all over the world for our different needs. For example, two years ago, I wanted to apply to four university. At that time I did not know anything about the process of applying. So I needed someone to help me. In my city, there was not any one who had conditions like me. I search the Internet. Unfortunately I found some people who were accepted at the universities where I was going to apply for. Intrestingly, I made friends with them. So they helped me at that time with my needs. Also, I helped them with their problems that they wanted to know about my countries. They had to travel to my country to make deal with some computer company. Since I was working at some companies that time I introduced them with them too. As you can see, at some situations you have to make some new friends.
To sum up, making new firends is more important than keeping our old friends. Not only do we learn some new experiences, but we also sometime must make new friends. Everyone have to make new friends as they change their conditions such as schools, cities.
- TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which informa 73
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 369, Rule ID: KNEW_NEW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'new'?
Suggestion: new
.... I had a lot of friends who could just knew English. But since I am so sociable. I ...
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Line 3, column 339, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'anyone'?
Suggestion: anyone
...e to help me. In my city, there was not any one who had conditions like me. I search th...
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Line 3, column 747, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...o make deal with some computer company. Since I was working at some companies that ti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, for example, such as, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2062.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.44396551724 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47553051641 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.428879310345 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 627.3 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.6003584229 165% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.9833975097 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 60.6470588235 100.406767564 60% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.6470588235 20.6045352989 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.26470588235 5.45110844103 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2596391752 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0730946569383 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0943257574551 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202927174509 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0703848922612 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.3 11.7677419355 54% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 58.1214874552 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.88 10.9000537634 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.49 8.01818996416 81% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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