Some people think that fostering different talents among students is desirable since every student has different talents and interested fields. However, this specialized curriculum in the early age can rather forfeit the chance to learn all subjects from students. The following essay will argue why that is.
Admittedly, the diversified curriculum can provide an adequate education for those who had found their interest in the early age. Those who are talented at music can use more time to study related subjects and to practice musical instruments. Also, students who are good at languages can learn second or third language in school. This education which provides an appropriate education fits for the talents and the interests of the students can be beneficial to foster one's talents from the early age.
However, high school should be the place to provide educational chance to learn basic knowledge about broad subjects. The different curriculum from others might forfeit the chance to learn diverse subjects before entering college. For instance, students entering foreign language high school can learn their second and third language. However, due to the lack of curriculum in science, students are not able to enhance their scientific knowledge since they entered the school. Since their understanding for the science is stagnated at the middle school level, many students cannot understand the basic knowledge in science. This is disadvantageous to foster all-rounded students.
To sum up, even though the diversified curriculum can foster young and talented students in certain fields, it might forfeit the chance to learn diverse subjects in the high school. Therefore, the same national curriculum is more appropriate for the purpose of the high school education.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
No. of Words: 276 //in average, 450 words for issue essays will be ideal
we realized that you can't bring enough reasons for the argument.
how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, for this essay, we may bring advantages like:
1. it will not give students more choices, like your arguments
2. it will be not good for talented students,
3. it will be not good for a multi-cultural society, different ethnic communities should be given the opportunity to preserve and promote their traditional cultures
...more
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For a more general rule, We may consider TLPE:
T means Time: put the argument on a history background to check out it is correct or not.
L means Location: test the argument on different locations/countries/regions.
P means People: test the argument on people.
E means Event: Some people may argue (in some events...) ...however, still I support ...
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 276 350
No. of Characters: 1477 1500
No. of Different Words: 134 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.076 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.351 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.641 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 117 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.998 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.467 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.381 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.561 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.099 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 296, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to second'
Suggestion: to second
...nts who are good at languages can learn second or third language in school. This educa...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, second, so, therefore, third, for instance, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 33.0505617978 39% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 58.6224719101 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1514.0 2235.4752809 68% => OK
No of words: 276.0 442.535393258 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48550724638 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.55969084622 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70002178183 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 215.323595506 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 459.0 704.065955056 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.3480704058 60.3974514979 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.933333333 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 5.21951772744 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173419876864 0.243740707755 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0633215023452 0.0831039109588 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0482398800873 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107945338676 0.150359130593 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0428691169237 0.0667264976115 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 12.1639044944 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 100.480337079 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.