Throughout the humans life, friends can have a vital rule in their happines. A person can spend his time to be joyfull by choosing friends in his carrier. Some people believe that any one must have different kind of friend for leisure time while, the others disagrss. From my point of view, I postulate that a person needs plenty of freinds.
The main reason is that, various atmosphere make life more happier. This is due to more places that a person can experience. For example, I am a student in MS.c course in Tehran. Since my university rules are severe, I dont usually go out with my familly. Study in a same room for more thatn forteen hours gave me a kind of syndroom and I really exhausted. Conversly, my brother' Morteza' live in Esfahan andd has myriad of friends. He always spend his time with different group of friends and experience different enviromen. Eventhough the city that my brother lives is more condense in comparision to Tehran, but he is more fun. So different friends help a person to be in various situation and make them more fun.
The other reason is that, a person learn more. Different persons have various jobs and if a person have more friends he will learn more. For instance, The time that I was in highschool, In my class every person has abillity in specific courses. Since I had problem with almost all the courses, I tried to have relationship with all of them. I could learn different courses from different person, as a sample 'Vahid' taught me mathematics and 'Amir' worked on physics. Because of diversity of friends, I could elucidate my problem and finally take good marks in highschool and made me happier. So different friends can teach a person different branch and that make him more experienced and happier.
All in all, as the aforementioned examples have illustrated, more than few friends help a person in his carrier to be joyful. Not only in a person can be in different atmosphere, but also he can raise his experience. Therefore, I think that people must have plenty of friends.
- TPO 1, Integrated Writing 3
- tpo 47 73
- TPO 49 63
- Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. 76
- The perceived greatness of any political leader has more to do with the challenges faced by that leader than any of his or her inherent skills and abilities. 58
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 16, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'humans'' or 'human's'?
Suggestion: humans'; human's
Throughout the humans life, friends can have a vital rule in ...
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Line 1, column 181, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'anyone'?
Suggestion: anyone
...n his carrier. Some people believe that any one must have different kind of friend for ...
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Line 3, column 55, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'happier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: happier
...n is that, various atmosphere make life more happier. This is due to more places that a pers...
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Line 3, column 220, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...Since my university rules are severe, I dont usually go out with my familly. Study i...
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Line 3, column 442, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'spends'.
Suggestion: spends
...n andd has myriad of friends. He always spend his time with different group of friend...
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Line 5, column 310, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... almost all the courses, I tried to have relationship with all of them. I could l...
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Line 7, column 97, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ted, more than few friends help a person in his carrier to be joyful. Not only in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, really, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i think, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1682.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69832402235 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6244321207 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505586592179 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.577821729 48.9658058833 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 73.1304347826 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5652173913 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.21739130435 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141856374598 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0471461147381 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0329042299308 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0931091383426 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0293649044108 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 11.7677419355 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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