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In this set of material, the reading passage presents three ways to prevent birds from crash to transparent glass. The lecturer challenges this solution and finds them unlikely to prevent birds from collide.
Firstly, the author of the passage claims that using one-way glass which are transparent from inside and opaque from outside could alarm birds as a solid material to avoid crash. In contrast, the professor refutes this point by saying that the opaque side of glass seems as a mirror and reflect sky, as a result birds could not distinguish between sky and reflection on mirror, so collide to the glass. Hence, this solution unlikely to be beneficial.
Secondly, the reading passage asserts that painting outer side of glass with colorful stripes lines avoids birds to fly through the glass. The lecturer, however, casts doubt on this point and says that birds see spaces between lines as a hole and fly toward this empty spaces, therefore crash to the glass. To avoid this crash unpainted spaces should be in minimum size, but the inside become dark.
Finally, the passage mentions that using magnetic field should apply in order to guide birds for other direction. The lecturer rebuts this point and says that birds use magnetic field as a compass for long distance fly and utilize their eye for short distances. Therefore, using magnetic field to prevent glass crash is useless.
- In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. 70
- Do you agree or disagree?Educating children become more difficult than before due to the new technology such as social networks, online games and cell phones 76
- In this essay I submit in different format, with three paragraph seasons. 3
- TPO24 integrated writing-Enhanced 76
- TPO45-second try 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 126, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... birds for other direction. The lecturer rebuts this point and says that birds us...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, second, secondly, so, therefore, in contrast, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 10.4613686534 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1163.0 1373.03311258 85% => OK
No of words: 232.0 270.72406181 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01293103448 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90276135726 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28459254778 2.5805825403 89% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 145.348785872 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530172413793 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 340.2 419.366225166 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5398662403 49.2860985944 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.727272727 110.228320801 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0909090909 21.698381199 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.36363636364 7.06452816374 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.3589403974 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.2367328918 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 63.6247240618 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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