The company you work for is opening a new branch in another country and you would like to work there. Write a letter to your manager and say
– Why are you suitable to work in that country?
– What job would you like to take in the new office?
– Ask about the work to be done in the new branch?
Dear Mr. Smith,
I am writing with regard to a new office that the company is going to open in Australia. I would like to announce that I would be grateful if I have the chance to move to the new branch and work there permanently.
In view of this, I believe that I would be suitable for the new branch and for the position of Database Administration since I have had more than 12 years of experience in this field and I have worked with this company since 4 years ago; besides I am qualified enough to take the position. Furthermore, I have some family members who live there and it would help me to get familiar with the environment, the new culture and customs as soon as possible.
As I mentioned before, I believe that I am suitable for being in charge of the Data ware House department due to the knowledge and experience that I obtained during the past few years. Moreover, I have an excellent knowledge of English which will help me to communicate well with the clients and customers.
I would be grateful if you could give me some more details about the terms and conditions of working in this new branch. I need to know if it will include accommodation or not as well as the monthly salary.
I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely,
Rahi Honarvar
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...r not as well as the monthly salary. I am looking forward to hearing from you....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, furthermore, if, look, moreover, so, well, as well as, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 35.0 32.9175257732 106% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 26.3917525773 133% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1058.0 937.175257732 113% => OK
No of words: 236.0 206.0 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48305084746 4.54256449028 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91947592106 3.78020617076 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6518924855 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 127.690721649 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542372881356 0.622605031667 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 333.9 290.88556701 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 16.3608247423 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.4738249281 44.8134815571 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.8 76.5299724578 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6 16.8248392259 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8 4.34317383033 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27496304599 0.216113520407 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101580114896 0.0766984524023 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0888970430868 0.0603063233224 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156211843094 0.12726935374 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0911893188338 0.0580467560999 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 8.37731958763 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 70.7449484536 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.0 8.71597938144 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 7.59969072165 99% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 41.2886597938 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 8.62886597938 203% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 11.2 8.54432989691 131% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.