Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children rely too much on the technology, like computers, smart phones, video games for fun and entertainment. Playing simpler toys or playing outside with friends would be better for children’s development.
Since the dawn of civilization, parents have been perennially looking for appropriate ways to entertain their children as well as help them to develop. In the modern era, due to struggling with ample issues in the hectic life, parents do not have sufficient time for up-bringing their children. As a result, kids rely too much on the technology such as computers, smart phones and so on. However, in the past, children usually played with their friends and simpler toys. Here, the controversial question brings up to the mind whether the old-fashioned way of playing is better for development of kids. Some people are inclined toward the position that being depended on technology and using modern devices will have more impact on children’s development, whilst others look at this concept thorough different lens, and are of the position that playing with peers and unsophisticated toys will be better. I, contrary to the popular belief, contend that the second way has impressive impact on children’s future and their development. There are numerous reasons three of which will be cogently substantiated in what follows.
The most exquisite reason which is worth mentioning here is an undeniable fact that playing with friend is necessary for socializing. In other words, kids can ameliorate the social skills and behaviors by spending time with their friends. Moreover, not only do they enjoy but also, they communicate with others. Hence, they can boost their confidence, learn how to interact with others and solve their problems and more importantly, learn how to share their properties. Take a personal example, when I was a child, I played with my friends in the yard. One day, I had argument with one of my friends for his toys because he did not let me used his. But, at the end, we learned that we could exchange our toys and it was more enjoyable.
Another equally noteworthy point to collaborating my stance is the profound influence of playing simpler toys on creativity. Obviously, children are always looking for new idea, and they enjoy playing with new toys. Hence, parents can work on kids’ creativity by teaching them how to make new things by simple materials. Furthermore, kids use their imagination in order to build up new things. Thus, they become more innovative during their playing time. To shed light on this issue, my 2 years old niece always produce new toys for herself. For instance, one she used her pencils and cars to build highway and she put her dolls instead of polices. This way of playing is extremely crucial for enhancing imagination ability and being creative.
Finally, yet importantly, another reason why I agree with this statement is indisputable fact that playing with others usually used up more energy. For example, children play soccer, volleyball and so on, which includes high physical activity. Therefore, children who play these kind of game, in most of cases, are not over weight and they are healthier than children who plays video or computer games. The noteworthy statistics, revealed by a recent research conducted in my country; show that approximately ninety percent of kids who just sit in front of computer are suffering from being over-weighted and they become lazier. On the other hand, children who play out are healthier and they are in better shape.
In brief, taking all the aforementioned reasons in to account, one can surmise that children who play out with friends and toys rather than computer and video games, are more sociable, creative and healthier. However, that was a story in a nutshell. There exist innumerable reasons and examples which champion my stance and are not mentioned here. Apparently, in the not too distant future, various kinds of modern devices will become more and more popular. Consequently, governments should take serious measures in order to provide playground and amusement facilities to attract children.
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- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children rely too much on the technology, like computers, smart phones, video games for fun and entertainment. Playing simpler toys or playing outside with friends would be better for children’s dev 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 273, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
... activity. Therefore, children who play these kind of game, in most of cases, are not over...
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Line 4, column 296, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the cases') or simply say ''most cases''.
Suggestion: most of the cases; most cases
...hildren who play these kind of game, in most of cases, are not over weight and they are healt...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, consequently, finally, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, in brief, kind of, such as, as a result, as well as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 86.0 52.1666666667 165% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3292.0 1977.66487455 166% => OK
No of words: 642.0 407.700716846 157% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1277258567 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.03365860172 4.48103885553 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78859705268 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 335.0 212.727598566 157% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521806853583 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 988.2 618.680645161 160% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.6003584229 160% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.9522183846 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.7575757576 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4545454545 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.36363636364 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 26.0 11.8709677419 219% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.357168020504 0.236089414692 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0900561699774 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0642545042093 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202701401409 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0603470640545 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 151.0 86.8835125448 174% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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