Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
After shortly examining the case presented in the prompt, I believe this is quite a complicated topic, which requires more thorough tangible evidence to determine. The discovery of the basket in Lithos, does require the experts to re-evaluate the original argument of the Paleans owning the patent. However, they are far from being able to conclude the opposite of the original argument.
In the description, one assumption the experts have hold is that it was only through boats, could the Palean basket migrate to the other side of the river. However, could the fast current of the Brim, by any chance, be the mysterious deliverer of the basket from one side of the river bank to the other side? Furthermore, what if the Palean basket was not transported by the Palean boats but by the boats from Lithos? What is the basket was first sold to a nearby village that used boats to help the circulation of goods back then? Therefore, before we can confidently reach a conclusion whether these special woven baskets are not unique to the ancient Paleans, it is also necessary to prove that the basket could not be transported by any other means, like the Brim or the boats from other villages.
In addition, no Palean boats were found, and some archaeologists assumed that the lacking evidence of boats is indicating that ancient residents of Palea did not use them. I find this assumption a little too naive, because there may be other reasons why the boats could not be discovered, for example, it could be that these ancient transportation tools on the water failed to survive in the nature and just simply perished in history. Therefore, unless the experts can provide information excluding all other possible reasons why they were not able to find any boat relics, it is very presumptious to say the “woven baskets” is not uniquely Palean.
It seems “straightforward” to establish the idea that the baskets are no longer unique to the Paleans; more substantial proofs are indespensible to support it.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Therefore, unless the experts can provide information excluding all other possible reasons why they were not able to find any boat relics, it is very presumptious to say the woven baskets is not uniquely Palean.
Error: presumptious Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: It seems straightforward to establish the idea that the baskets are no longer unique to the Paleans; more substantial proofs are indespensible to support it.
Error: indespensible Suggestion: indispensable
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flaws:
1. for the argument in the third paragraph, it is not the way of GRE argument.
look how it said:
'no Palean boats have been found.', it didn't say 'no any boats have been found.'. so we may argue :
maybe there are boats from Lithos (like you did in the second paragraph).
and this is the correct argument.
2. also need to argue 'The Brim River is very deep and broad', maybe 'it is not deep and broad in the ancient time.'
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suggestions:
Try to bring three arguments in 3 paragraphs.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 340 350
No. of Characters: 1623 1500
No. of Different Words: 173 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.294 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.774 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.611 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 110 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 81 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.295 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.38 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.623 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.144 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, for example, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1689.0 2260.96107784 75% => OK
No of words: 340.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96764705882 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94399864601 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532352941176 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 705.55239521 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.4426630754 57.8364921388 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.75 119.503703932 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3333333333 23.324526521 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.83333333333 5.70786347227 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127801978211 0.218282227539 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.052142377178 0.0743258471296 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0362685140378 0.0701772020484 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0658957596405 0.128457276422 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0360901280852 0.0628817314937 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.3799401198 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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