A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
As a language teacher for the past five years, I have learned this is one of the most debated topic in the current field of education. Honestly, I believe this is a very complicated matter and requires thorough discussion. However, from my own perspective, I hold that although a uniform national curriculum has its own merits, it still owns quite a few disadvantages we need to address and to overcome.
One of the most characteristic strength of implementing a national curriculum is that it is able to orient the general education direction of a nation. A consistent curriculum will provide teachers guidelines what they need to focus on teaching, which will help the educators to clearly set up their goals and objectives, and which in turn, will lead students to develop in an appropriate direction. For instance, China adopts a national curriculum that is used by elementary and secondary education. Because of its strong focus on math, Chinese students have a higher average in terms of their math performance. What is more, if there is a premeditated guideline a teacher can refer to, it will bolster the teacher’s working efficiency. Take myself as an example, when I was teaching under a required curriculum, I did not have to decide what I needed to teach and what materials I could use. However, currently, as a Chinese language teacher in college here in the U.S., I have to come up with my teaching goals and decide on the materials on my own, which I find very time consuming. However, while a national curriculum can provide these convenience to teachers, I believe, there are many disadvantages of employing it.
To begin with, in order to be well-aligned with the pre-selected goals and teaching materials, teachers may tailor their teaching methods to accommodate to these goals. Also, teachers may have to teach some contents that they are not passionate about, and as a result, will be demotivated. What is more, more than often, when there is a national curriculum, teachers usually tend to assess their teaching and their students’ learning outcomes by students’ test results of certain types of exams. A strong focus on test results will misguide teachers and students to concentrate on merely doing well in the tests rather than actually learning. For instance, the one goal of China’s elementary and secondary’ eductors is to prepare students well to pass the national college entrance exam so that students will be able to be admitted to universities. Because of this strong focus on succeed in the entrance exam, both teachers and students are under a lot of stress. Since the students have to learn whatever is listed on the curriculum, their motivation may be curbed.
Therefore, there are many merits of a national curriculum such as that it offers a clear guide and it provides efficiency, we cannot simply ignore the bad that comes with these good. In fact, we need re-evaluate a national curriculum’s role and adjust it to achieve a balance between a clear direction and a free teaching and learning environment.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1141, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this convenience' or 'these conveniences'?
Suggestion: this convenience; these conveniences
...while a national curriculum can provide these convenience to teachers, I believe, there are many ...
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Line 5, column 26, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...be curbed. Therefore, there are many merits of a national curriculum such as ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, honestly, however, if, may, second, so, still, therefore, well, while, for instance, in fact, such as, as a result, to begin with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2573.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 511.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03522504892 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05842481341 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477495107632 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 823.5 704.065955056 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.10617977528 290% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1306005179 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.65 118.986275619 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.55 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.95 5.21951772744 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168545882629 0.243740707755 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.057167172189 0.0831039109588 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0345031641791 0.0758088955206 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105749687898 0.150359130593 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0352316937573 0.0667264976115 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.1392134831 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 100.480337079 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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