Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful, others disagree. Discuss both the vie

Nowadays when you want to find new job, you maybe encounter many question about yourself from your age to personal information, like your habit, your hobbies and your interest, or maybe you are married, single or divorced. Is this information necessary for company or not?
Some people believe that when owner wanted to employ new staff most know about his or her personality and character, Although it is not 100 percent useful, but help company to use from new software to know about new personnel character and know she or he is suitable for this situation or nor. For example a sensitive person can not decide confidently in position of judge between person.
Smoking is a personal question, if you attention very hard for smoking person to work in places that staff hate from smoke and vice versa.
In the other hand, others think so disimilar, in their opinion my character in my life has very different by my work character, whereas I am a sensible in my life, can be a confidental person in my office. They say the employers can not decided from my application, about me.
In conclusion, not only writing personal information in job applicant not worse but also help to company find suitable person for new station, and don not employ not suitable person.

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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS General Training
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 61, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun question seems to be countable; consider using: 'many questions'.
Suggestion: many questions
...nt to find new job, you maybe encounter many question about yourself from your age to persona...
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Line 2, column 241, Rule ID: KNOW_NOW[4]
Message: Did you mean 'now'?
Suggestion: now
... know about new personnel character and know she or he is suitable for this situatio...
^^^^
Line 4, column 237, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'can' requires base form of the verb: 'decide'
Suggestion: decide
... office. They say the employers can not decided from my application, about me. In conc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, whereas, for example, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1049.0 1615.20841683 65% => OK
No of words: 219.0 315.596192385 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7899543379 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84690116678 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6002150697 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 176.041082164 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58904109589 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 332.1 506.74238477 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.5700324551 49.4020404114 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.125 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.375 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.375 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21743734526 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10470606178 0.084324248473 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0438530029538 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112124205531 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0333100900857 0.056905535591 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 78.4519038076 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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