The graph below shows the writing technology used by undergraduate students to prepare assignments at a university in 1970, 1982 and 1994.
The vertical graph reveals the proportion of assignments prepared by multifarious technology apparatus over period of 24 years.
It can be clearly seen that from 1970 to 1994, the proportion of assignments prepared by Ball point pen plunged from 50 to 10% . Next, assignments made by Fountain pen also followed a curtailing trend, falling from less than 40 to about 4% between 1970 and 1982, remaining same till 1994.
The vertical graph demonstrates that there was no use of Computer to design assignments in 1970 where as it made a remarkable improvement, rising from 10 to 50% in last 12 years. Furthermore, 4 times more assignments was developed by Typewriter in 1982 and 1994 as compared to 1970, only 10%.
It is, therefore, clear that technological progress has transformed the choice from Ball pen, fountain pen to Computer and typewriter for assignments preparation with the passage of time.
- Being a celebrity – such as a famous film star or sports personality – brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems? 78
- Many people had been involved in sports as children but don t do any physical exercise as adults What are the reasons people avoid physical exercise How to overcome this trend and motivate to be more physically active 80
- Nowadays young people are spending most of their leisure time using smartphone and tablets for amusement Is it a positive or a negative development Give your opinion 96
- People think that good health is a basic need so it should not be in hands of profit oriented companies Are the advantages of profit oriented companies overweight the disadvantages 57
- Humans tend to copy one another especially in fashion choice of clothes and consumer goods Do you agree or disagree Provide your view and examples from your own experience 90
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sir what could I do more to
sir what could I do more to upgrade my score to 8.0 in this above task 1 ??
and how much band score does less word limit reduce..??
n if data is given in past years such as in 1990, 1994 then is it better to write in past indefinite tense or can we write in present indefinite ??
which tense is suitable to write ??
Q1: what could I do more to
Q1: what could I do more to upgrade my score to 8.0 in this above task 1 ??
answer:
1. Need to have a good structure. (you have)
better to have 4 paragraphs:
para 1: introduction
para 2: body 1
para 3: body 2
para 4: conclusion
sample:
http://www.testbig.com/ielts-essays/graph-below-gives-information-about…
or
para 1: introduction
para 2: conclusion
para 3: body 1
para 4: body 2
sample:
http://www.testbig.com/ielts-essays/climograph-below-shows-average-mont…
http://www.testbig.com/ielts-essays/graphs-below-show-types-music-album…
2. Around 175 - 200 words (You don't have)
3. Polished sentences with different words. (read some samples essays for task I)
Q2: how much band score does less word limit reduce..??
answer: For task I, minimum 150 words, ideal 200 words. For task II, minimum 250 words, ideal 350 words.
The secret is: More words, higher marks.
Q3:if data is given in past years such as in 1990, 1994 then is it better to write in past indefinite tense or can we write in present indefinite ??
which tense is suitable to write ??
answer: depends.
If you talk about something happened in 1994, better to use past indefinite tense, while if you talk about the table or graphics, present indefinite is ok.
Let us know if you have more questions.
flaws:
No. of Words: 148 200
Minimum 150 words wanted.
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 6 10
No. of Words: 148 200
No. of Characters: 729 1000
No. of Different Words: 91 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.488 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.926 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.049 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 45 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 41 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 35 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.955 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.517 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.835 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.144 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4