independent essay-TPO46
Celebrities and news about them are one of the most unavoidable things these days, its like they are everywhere, everyone is just talking about them, to lots of people their lives is just so interesting. While some of the people think they are just so important for the younger generations but some others dont. I agree with the fact that younger people are more involved with the celebrities.
First, the most important reason of young people have more passion to the celebrities is that they have more entertainment and sports than older people. So, it is obvious that youngsters feel connected with their favrite celebrities than older people. This love for their celebrities influences their way of living and the value the opinion of the celebrities. For example, when I was kid 15 years ago my favorite sport was soccer. I used to be play soccer with my brothers and Ali Daie was captain of national soccer team. He was good at football play. Everyone like to play like him such as my brothers, sometimes when one of my brother played reporter role in the children soccer match he always gave the nick name such as Ali daie to other children.
Second, younger people are more sociabale than older people. They need to wear diffrent from others to be more attracted by others so they use the social media all the time. social networks for example, try to promote some advertisment to make more money; they, consequently need to increase their members. One of most important ways to increase their members is that they try to spread some news and photos about famous people such as entertainers, athletes, and actors. Teenager start to talk about this kind of topic.
In conclusion, While some of the people think they are just so important for the younger generations but some others do nt. I agree with the fact that younger people are more involved with the celebrities because they have more entertainment and sports than older people and passioning the yang people have to the celebrities and they want to be different and distinct.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Celebrities and news about them are one ...
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...eir lives is just so interesting. While some of the people think they are just so important...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...the younger generations but some others dont. I agree with the fact that younger peo...
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Line 2, column 315, Rule ID: AGREE_WITH_THE_FACT[1]
Message: Use simply 'agree that'.
Suggestion: agree that
...ger generations but some others dont. I agree with the fact that younger people are more involved with t...
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Suggestion: Social
...they use the social media all the time. social networks for example, try to promote so...
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Suggestion: some
...is kind of topic. In conclusion, While some of the people think they are just so important...
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Line 5, column 126, Rule ID: AGREE_WITH_THE_FACT[1]
Message: Use simply 'agree that'.
Suggestion: agree that
...er generations but some others do nt. I agree with the fact that younger people are more involved with t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, second, so, while, for example, in conclusion, kind of, such as, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1705.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 352.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84375 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54050191637 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.457386363636 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 522.9 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.6916018142 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.294117647 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7058823529 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35294117647 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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