Students at a university often have a choice of places to live. They may choose to live in university dormitories, or they may choose to live in apartments in the community. Compare the advantages of living in university housing with the advantages of living in an apartment in the community. where would you prefer to live? Give reasons for your preference.
Both apartment houses and dormitory have their special advantages and disadvantages .matters like being with friends ,studding better , convenience , privacy and living expenses are things which are important in choosing living place. I myself prefer to live in dormitory because it is chipper and another reason is involving in university matters and my third reason is a variety of services that dorm offers to students.
One of the most important things for students is living expenses and everyone knows that expenses of dorm is much more lower than renting an apartment ,in addition expenses of performing devices for house and utensils are extra expense and it seems logical for a students to be economical and live in dorm.
Second reason to me for choosing dorm is involving in university and studding matters whereas when you live in dorm you have interaction with most of your classmates and if you be absent in a class or do not understand lessons your classmates can help you to learn it and thus you can cooperate together to solve problems but in apartment you will be lone without any motivator and guide.
And last reason for choosing dorm is a variety of services that dormitory offers to students , services like feeding ,library and gym .performing food in apartment is your responsibility and it is very difficult and time consuming ,for example suppose you have final exam and you should waste your time in cooking but in dorm cook serves your food.
In my opinion , living in dorm is preferable for students whereas dorm is chipper and studding in dorm is easier and next reason is services that dorm offer .if I want to choose between apartment and dorm certainly I would choose dormitory.
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Sentence: Both apartment houses and dormitory have their special advantages and disadvantages .matters like being with friends ,studding better , convenience , privacy and living expenses are things which are important in choosing living place.
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Sentence: I myself prefer to live in dormitory because it is chipper and another reason is involving in university matters and my third reason is a variety of services that dorm offers to students.
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Sentence: Second reason to me for choosing dorm is involving in university and studding matters whereas when you live in dorm you have interaction with most of your classmates and if you be absent in a class or do not understand lessons your classmates can help you to learn it and thus you can cooperate together to solve problems but in apartment you will be lone without any motivator and guide.
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