A job with more vacation time
In a culture where the realms of knowledge are expanding and because as a modern society we seem to so busy, finding a good job to cope with today’s life is one of the great challenges in recent years; a job by which we could be able to fulfill all of our needs. Even though a job with a high salary seems a great option, it doesn’t work all that well. In my view, there are many factors contributing to finding a job and having more time to ourselves is a major factor. Consequently, a job with more vacation time seems a great idea to get involved with. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
Certainly, in trying to explain the outcomes of a job with more vacation time one would have to place great emphasis on enough sleep that we can get. As studies have shown, we should spend one-third of our lives sleeping, ranging from 8 hours a day to 14hours, for example, 7-8 hours per day during adulthood and12-14 hours per day during infancy. The type of sleep most associated with learning, memory consolidation, and emotional processing. Unfortunately, we all are obsessed with working to earn more money and we are ill-equipped to recognize the impacts of sleep deprivation. Studies have indicated that many people are suffering from sleep deprivation and it could lead to mental health problems. The consequences of this epidemic go well beyond that, sadly contributing to depression, suicide, substance use, and the like. As a result, people should give more prominence to sleeping in order to reduce the consequences of this epidemic.
On top of that, it would be significant to adduce that we should give a high priority to life satisfaction. Since satisfaction and relationships are so closely linked together, when we communicate with people more, we are much more satisfied with our lives. As a research has shown, the more relationships we have, the more satisfied people we are. Of importance is the fact that not only could more relationships boost our life satisfaction, it also could foster our longevity, as Susan Pinker and her colleagues have shown. A job with less vacation time places a heavy demand on our time. This is the time that could be spent on family, friends, and relaxing in other ways. It’s worth noting, connection is one of the basic human needs we all have and it will never be fulfilled with spending time on the job. Not to mention, only rarely can we find any human being that experienced life satisfaction because exaggeration is used at the expanse of productivity.
Taking all aforementioned arguments into account leads me to believe that in an age when there is/are abundant opportunities to find a good job, it is vital to everyone to provide as much information as possible to weigh up the pros and cons of every job, which really is paramount to devising an effective solution so as to find a job that well suits us and have a safer, healthier lifestyle. Although many people will argue that there are tremendous benefits to having a job with high salary and they are thinking to themselves “we are doing good”, they are barely passing. Spending time on ourselves increases life satisfaction twice as much as wealth. The more materialistic people are, the less satisfied they are with their lives. Advocates of jobs with more vacation time and research in this area have produced tremendous science showing the tremendous benefits of a job with more vacation time. My personal argument as a sovereign human being for this is that the benefits of a job with more vacation time outweigh the costs and that spending more time on living rather than on working should be at the forefront of every person’s mind. We get one life to live and it’s up to us to make the most of it. We shouldn’t waste it on working and we could spend it with people who are meaningful to us.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
... much more satisfied with our lives. As a research has shown, the more relationships we ha...
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Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...mount to devising an effective solution so as to find a job that well suits us and have ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, really, so, third, well, as to, for example, as a result, in my view, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 15.1003584229 219% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 99.0 52.1666666667 190% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 8.0752688172 297% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3232.0 1977.66487455 163% => OK
No of words: 674.0 407.700716846 165% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79525222552 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.0952438579 4.48103885553 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84304898999 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 302.0 212.727598566 142% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448071216617 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1026.9 618.680645161 166% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.4651455309 48.9658058833 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.428571429 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0714285714 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.03571428571 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.487329510079 0.236089414692 206% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.159359342254 0.076458572812 208% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.180075709487 0.0737576698707 244% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.356823512069 0.150856017488 237% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0994759961272 0.0645574589148 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 141.0 86.8835125448 162% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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