The memo from the vice president of a large,highly diversified company claims that for the next contemplated new building project ,approaching alpha construction company is better when compared to that of the Zeta construction company. As the argument does not examine the stated and unstated assumptions about comparison of two construction companies and their relationship with respect to the different locations where the new buildings are constructed, the passage lacks sufficient evidences to justify the claim.
The company has two new office buildings constructed at the regional headquarters of two different locations. We can assume that two different locations had varied tax rate on the materials required for the new building constructions. We can assume that the new building supervised by the Zeta construction company need to pay more in order to purchase the materials required for the construction of the building when compared with Alpa construction company. As two building have different locations, the tax on the materials and the cost rate of the materials might have varied the total expensive charge while building the new building. So, the cost rate and the tax per material may vary in different locations. We cannot conclude by stating Alpha building company is more convincing than Zeta in different locations.
The argument states that the Alpha construction company had stable workforce and little employee turnover , when compared with that of the Zeta company. But, the argument does not provide efficient informations to support the claim. We can also assume that the Alpa construction company was located in the more rural areas , where the people most likely work in the building construction. Those can be employees whose life mainly stand upon their income. So, we can consider the Alpha company had stable workforce.Where as ,we can assume that the Zeta company is located at more urban area where the workforces might be involved at multiple other tasks apart from the constructions and expect more employment turnover when compared to Alpha builders.So, deciding to prefer Alpha builders in the future construction projects could vary the workforce stability and turnover with respect to the location. Thus, the passage fails to provide more supportive evidences to state Why Alpha can be considered for building projects when compared to Zeta builders.
The argument state that the energy consumption of the Zeta building company has been higher compared to the Alpha company every year. So, we can assume that alpha company might be located in more urban area when compared to the Alpha company. There might be more employers in Zeta .As the increase in the employment rate might have increased the energy consumption every year. More the employers in the company, more electricity will be consumed each year. Thus, we cannot conclude that increased energy consumption in Zeta company might be the major reason to disclaim the builders while considering the next building.
To summarise, the argument fail to provide the convincing assumptions to state the importance of alpha building company while constructing the new building headquarters. There might be differences in the workforces and employers turnovers in different locations. Also the cost rate and tax per building materials vary in different locations. Such assumptions weakens the given argument.
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 483 350
No. of Characters: 2483 1500
No. of Different Words: 201 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.688 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.141 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.623 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 179 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 139 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 98 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 60 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.15 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.734 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.35 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.373 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.577 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.13 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 44, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , highly
... memo from the vice president of a large,highly diversified company claims that for the...
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Line 1, column 130, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e next contemplated new building project ,approaching alpha construction company i...
^^
Line 3, column 480, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nstruction company. As two building have different locations, the tax on the mate...
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Line 5, column 106, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e workforce and little employee turnover , when compared with that of the Zeta com...
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Line 5, column 323, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...pany was located in the more rural areas , where the people most likely work in th...
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Line 5, column 390, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this can' or 'Those cans'?
Suggestion: This can; Those cans
...kely work in the building construction. Those can be employees whose life mainly stand u...
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Line 5, column 402, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the building construction. Those can be employees whose life mainly stand upon t...
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Line 5, column 516, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Where
... the Alpha company had stable workforce.Where as ,we can assume that the Zeta company...
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Line 5, column 516, Rule ID: WHERE_AS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Whereas'?
Suggestion: Whereas
... the Alpha company had stable workforce.Where as ,we can assume that the Zeta company is...
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Line 5, column 524, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ha company had stable workforce.Where as ,we can assume that the Zeta company is l...
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Line 5, column 752, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...urnover when compared to Alpha builders.So, deciding to prefer Alpha builders in t...
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Line 7, column 281, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...y. There might be more employers in Zeta .As the increase in the employment rate m...
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Line 7, column 283, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: As
... There might be more employers in Zeta .As the increase in the employment rate mig...
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Line 7, column 283, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... There might be more employers in Zeta .As the increase in the employment rate mig...
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Line 9, column 264, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...oyers turnovers in different locations. Also the cost rate and tax per building mate...
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Line 9, column 360, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'weaken'.
Suggestion: weaken
...n different locations. Such assumptions weakens the given argument.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, thus, while, apart from, such as, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 13.6137724551 162% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2883.0 2260.96107784 128% => OK
No of words: 532.0 441.139720559 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41917293233 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80261649409 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91058771587 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.366541353383 0.468620217663 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 890.1 705.55239521 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 85.3510929849 57.8364921388 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.347826087 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1304347826 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.17391304348 5.70786347227 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.25449101796 305% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.380690297654 0.218282227539 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143467535556 0.0743258471296 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129263435636 0.0701772020484 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25207817027 0.128457276422 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.1173481803 0.0628817314937 187% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.3799401198 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.3550499002 82% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.5979740519 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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