As the development of modern science and technology, some aspects of traditional culture are being lost, so some people think that the traditional culture will be replaced by the modern technology and science such as computer or internet.
Modern inventions are playing a vital role in this century. The importance of these innovations has increased, throughout the previous decades. Some people think that it has extracted the traditional cultures and customs from the modern world and these modern inventions was the death of traditional values. In my opinion, it maybe true only in some places, but it actually has made famous many cultural festivals throughout the globe. It means that an internet user can access to numerous cultures from his home. And he must be thankful to the modern technology.
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Sentence: All advertisements and publications have became true because of these technologies.
Description: A verb 'to have', uninflected present tense, infinitive or is not usually followed by a verb, past tense
Suggestion: Refer to have and became
For instance, Malaysia which have raised with a slogan of ' Truly Asia '.
Suggestion:For instance, Malaysia which has raised with a slogan of ' Truly Asia '.
Sentence: There are many other examples, where modern innovations are making spectacular directions for the tourism, therefore it has became an industry.
Description: A verb 'to have', present tense, 3rd person singular is not usually followed by a verb, past tense
Suggestion: Refer to has and became
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2 (read a good grammar book)
'On the other hand' means However. It doesn't mean 'On another hand'.
Be sensitive to use 'However','Nevertheless' and 'On the other hand'.
like in this sentence 'However, modern technologies have revolutionized our cultures globally.', you may remove 'However'.
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Score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 341 350
No. of Characters: 1805 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.297 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.293 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.024 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 140 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.944 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.803 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.611 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.324 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.532 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.062 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5