The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992.
Summarise the informatioin by selecting and reportin the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the information about radio and TV audiences in 24 hours in 1992 from October to December.
It can be outlined that the statistic of both groups fluctuated during the day. To be more specific, the TV audiences slightly increased from 3% at 6 am to 7% at 8 am before moderately falling back to 6% at midday. After that, this figure soared to its highest point at 48% at 8 pm with a gentle drop between 2 pm and 4 pm. From that point onwards, the rate of TV audiences dramatically shrunk to its minimum around 1% at 4 am before re-climbing to 3% at 6 am the next morning.
On the other hand, the data of audiences listening to the radio experienced another trend when compared with that of TV audiences. It firstly jumped to almost 30% before nine o’clock in the morning. Thereafter, this rate continually decreased in the following hours to 1% at 4 am with a slight increase between 4 pm (12%) and 5 pm (15%).
To sum up, there are more English audiences choosing the radio before 2 pm, and this trend reversed after that.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
1. this figure soared to its highest point at 48% at 8 pm with a gentle drop between 2 pm and 4 pm
it is not a 'gentle drop', but a 'big drop'
2. there are more English audiences choosing the radio before 2 pm
should be 'before 1 pm'
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 9 10
No. of Words: 195 200
No. of Characters: 821 1000
No. of Different Words: 108 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.737 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.21 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.689 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 55 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 40 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 28 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.228 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.333 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.413 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.659 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.049 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, so, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 5.60731707317 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 33.7804878049 136% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 865.0 965.302439024 90% => OK
No of words: 194.0 196.424390244 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.4587628866 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73207559907 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74372587403 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 106.607317073 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561855670103 0.547539520022 103% => OK
syllable_count: 245.7 283.868780488 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.9532896963 43.030603864 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 96.1111111111 112.824112599 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5555555556 22.9334400587 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.77777777778 5.23603664747 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0691045166259 0.215688989381 32% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0358603291878 0.103423049105 35% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0340766463682 0.0843802449381 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0589218447011 0.15604864568 38% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0285690693786 0.0819641961636 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.2329268293 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 61.2550243902 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.59 11.4140731707 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.06136585366 93% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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